~Chapter One It was a hot summer day, the air was humid and sticky. I sat at my desk in side my room peering out the window, looking at the little kids playing basketball across the street from me. I looked down at what I was doing. Tears trickled down my cheeks, I couldn't stop them. I read all the letters my dad had sent me, over and over again. Still trying to believe what had just happened recently. What I have just found out a month ago... A month ago... (Flash Black) I laid in my bed, listening to the birds chirping near my window. Mya, my cat was staring at them through the window. Knock Knock.... I crawled out of my bed, to go answer the front door, I was trotting down the steps, then I heard my mother. "Hello?" She said with a hint of curiosity in her voice. "Hello Ma'am. I'm afraid I have sad new. It seems your husband, Sergeant James Cattaway was Killed In Action." My mom stood there speechless, and I could see the disbelief in her eyes. "No..." She managed to whisper, trying so hard to hold back her tears. "I'm afraid so.. Here.." He handed her a folded American Flag. [/i] I still remember that day... I stood up and walked downstairs, my mom was sitting at the kitchen table staring off into space. "Ava we need to talk about something." She said, as she finally turned to find my presences. I sat down beside her, leaning my head against her. Her brunette hair was curled and beautifully kept, her skin was pale and it seem like she hadn't eaten in months. My hazel eyes twinkled under the morning sun, shining into the kitchen. My bleach blonde hair was tied up in a sloppy bun. I was a sun kissed tan, even though I hadn't been outside tanning. "I think it would be a good idea for a change." She said, my eyes widen. "A new house, a new neighborhood, a new life." She choked out. I could tell she couldn't stop thinking about him. I nodded, And for a while we just sat in silence. Our arms wrapped around one another. It was settled... We were leaving. ~~~~•~~~~•~~~~•~~~~•~~~~•~~~~ It seems like I've been having a rough time with my creative juice. and then finally I just had to write about this one. ? Yeah yeah. I hope you like it. Comment. And yea. If enough people like this I promise I'll stay on top of this one. I tend to slack off. Don't judge.
I like it. Just bugs me the way you said they talked to the mom. They wouldn't do that in real life. Sry I'm in the military and it just hits me hard when it comes to that. My apologies
~Chapter Two~ The clouds blocked the sun, as the world suddenly went dark. I finished duck tapping, the last box over. I sat in the empty room, listening to the familiar birds chirping at my window. I leaned against the last box I had to carry downstairs. "Ava come now!" My mom shouted from the down of the stairs, her voice echoed through the house. I didn't want to move, my body ached as I had to pack away my fathers things. It's not that it was hard to pack it away, it was that it was hard... Me mental still believes that their just playing some crazy game on me, and he gonna burst though the door and hug my tightly like he always did. I held the box tight against my chest, as I walked down the stairs. My mom was eyeing the guys that were moving the glass ware. She had written 'Fragile' in big letters across the sides and on the top. I rolled my eyes as her as I set the box down. I had written 'His Things' on the box. I couldn't write his name, it kills me inside to remember. I am dying inside. My dad was my hero, he was always there for me, more then my mom was at times. ***** I sat in the front seat of my mom's Electric blue 2013 Mustang. My mom had put some things that we might need in the back seat, which was completely filled since she thought we ' needed our whole wardrobe and lamps. I could hear Mya meowing in disapproval that her crate must had been get squashed between things. I plugged my ears with headphones, as I turn on the music, drooling out my mom sliding into the car, complaining about who knows what. ***** My mom said she wanted to stay away from the city for a while, so she bought a 10 arc lot on the lake, with a beautiful log cabin on it. I never in a million years think that I would live in a log cabin. ***** I slammed the car door, as I gazed intensely up at the house. It's in the middle of the school year, my mom managed to move out of the old house and find a new one in less than 6 months. I walked the the wooden steps, and took a deep breath. The scent of nature and the lake filled my nose. My lip curved into a smile as I walked inside. As I walk through the door, I stand there in complete and utter shock. Gasp ~~~~<<~~~~~~>>~~~~~~<<~~~~~~>>~~~~ I hope you like it! Especially that Cliffhanger. Comment!!!
Absolutely amazing. Beautiful description. Just a few spelling errors and a change of tense when she was in the car, other than that... It's amazing!Keep it up.
Thank you thank you. ? I know I tend to change tenses a lot. And spelling yea I know I suck at it at times.