Separate names with a comma.
(Riku is in the Room of Requirement, lol. Also, good to see you're still alive)
Lucy: *Walks to the girl with the guitar* Excuse me... I wanted to ask you something about your necklace...
(He'll let you win xD) Raiden: *Accidentally overestimates the wind power and blows the Jenga tower across the room* Well... Guess I lost, then....
Riku: *Eats and moves on to fruit salad and a bit of cake*
Raiden: *Smiles* Excellent!
Lucy: *Sees the crowd and the musician, and notices the necklace she has on, with a stone, and she sees it's similar to her own*
Rei: What? No! I don't even know him... Minato: Rei Arisato...
Lucy: *Hears singing from far away and goes towards it*
Lucy: *Wanders a street alone*
Lucy: *Fingers the necklace* This thing... How'd I get it..? *Still can't remember getting it at any point* Damn...
(Hello? What's happened so far?)
Bump again xD
Riku: Yeah, it does! *Smiles*
Gold, I just wanna ask (seriously, not trying to be mean or whatever) where you feel the punctuation is bad. Could you post some examples? I agree...
Raiden: Well, will you join us on our mission, then?
Minato: Is that so? I've already told you that I don't want to kill anyone but the ones that took my sister from me. I will not harm you, although...
Rei: *Looks surprised and almost falls* U-uh... Thanks?
Minato: ... I'm sorry. This isn't what I wanted to do with my life, but I must find my sister... She is all I have left.
Rei: Huh..? *Gets up and goes to the door*
Hmmm... Now to make this into a proper song!