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There are some errors in it and I describe setting more and make your character so we know why she would think the thoughts she does just a little...
Wither:rolls my eyes-
Lol yay can't wait
Scarlet:-heres the replies but ignores them still sleeping but feels things moving under her and screams as several snakes slide over her-...
Snow:looks around shivering- I really don't like creepy things like forest's at night but I can't really leave him
Scarlet: We use to live in Texas but we moved here when things got too hot -laughs- Snow: and the winters got cold -joins in and then smiles at...
Snow:-laughs- good, me and my sister just moved in. I'm snow Scarlet:smiles politely- Hi -stands clearly wanting to leave- Snow: How long have...
Nice writing though I'd make it a little longer but I liked the powerful ending made me think
So I'm wondering here what do y'all think so far on the story???
Scarlet:-mumbles to snow- now you've done it Snow:whispers back- be nice -smiles- Hello
(Sorry no give me a hint??)
Wither: there's always holes in every protection you should know that
(Yay lol glad to be back he he)
Snow:sees Raul and waves- Scarlet:makes snow stop- snow don't give him any reason to cross the street, you need to stop talking tho strangers
Snow: Aaron came out here and fell asleep and I came looking for him
I like it but in the first update when did he kiss her?
Snow:-sighs- sister why do you work at bars if you don't like the people? Scarlet: I get a lot of tips
Snow:walks in and takes one look at Wither before frowning- she's still living I see Wither: can't get rid of me sissy dearest even though you...
Snow:-wakes up and yawns- sis? Scarlet:-grumbles 5 more minutes- Lily:-doesnt wake Vincent:-picks her up and carries her on his back-
Wither:-snarls- then I'll cause you pain in this dear kingdom of yours -laughs -