Separate names with a comma.
Jess: -Debates whether to go or not, hoping she isn't actually evil-
(Could I join as a character from the American idiot musical? ((Greenday FTW!:L)) )
Night_Girl_44: Uh what? O.o
Jess: -Logs on- Night_Girl_44: Hai all :D
Jess: -Unlocks door- I'm home! Joe: -Frowns- When did you leave? Jess: -Facepalms-
Jess: -Pours a glass of water-
(Whats PaW?) Jess: -Buys a card. Walks home with her head down-
Jess: -Smiles- Okay thanks -Mind wanders, wondering where ravens clone lives- (Haha,ok)
Jess: -Chuckles- Yep
It's good, just remember a new line for each person speaking and to always use capital letters.
Jess: So...-Akwardly looks around-
I'm sorry but I hate 1D so much, and if I were to edit this and add detail I'd end up doing the whole story for you. Read a book, then read this....
Why did you put rp then?
Jess: -Logs off. Drives to card shop-
Jess: -Looks up seeing people crying. Frowns slightly and thinks *Its sad and everything...But we've only known her 10 minutes...All we know Is...
Jess: -Writes it down. Stares at the floor sadly/
Jess: Uh, Hi Llama brother -Looks slightly confused-
Jess: -Looks at the painting- Woah! You're a good painter!
Jess: -Smiles widely, as her second favourite MCR song plays- Thanks! Sounds great! -Laughs at Torrance- Nah...I take it you like llamas? -Laughs...
Jess: Cool! -Looks at Kaitlyn curiously-