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Pie!!! Thank you for finally saying what everybody else wants to!
But I still agree with Oreo.
Very well Apple, if you think you can help her to make this story good, I will trust you.
She says she has written before, so she's not new according to her own words.
Oreo, I like the way you think...
Kindness is also an author's friend...
Oreo... You always make me laugh somehow.
All readers are girls, did anyone else notice? I couldn't even read the whole thing because I already knew it was a cliche high school love story....
It has potential, no denying that. But, it needs work. The author refuses constructive criticism saying it's just mean comments...basically. It...
Wonderful as always.
Most of us are teens... No excuse really... And, we don't look for perfection... Just correct writing techniques...
Grammar and spacing I believe...start at the beginning... Detail does too if I'm correct...
I like it a lot. But please, longer updates! Otherwise, it's very good!
The plot in unclear, grammar needs work, and spacing is also flawed... Criticism...not slamming. Oh, and detail needs work.
Second-paged...again...
Adam's POV "Okay pretty boy, you know now to not mess with us." I said, still laughing a bit. "Ha, you two are weird." He said getting up. "We...
We are the best of friends... Lol
Sorry, I've been busy! I'll update tonight.
Should I continue?
I have self-control in real life, as well as the story.