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Jess: Uh right -Nods but looks at Dani slightly confused- let's go find him then..-Frowns still confused-um, why did you scratch him?
Jess: -Sighs and yawns bored, and starts to walk back to the school building-
Jess: -Sits on bleachers-
Father's P.O.V *** The scent of wine and tobacco filled my nostrils as I staggered into the dining room. The flash of lights from a golden...
Awesome so far
I like it,but proof read.Quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes.Also, I like long updates but if you're going to have them try using paragraphs.
Jess: -Sneaks away from the rest of the class and towards the main building-
Jess: -Jogs onto the field wondering whether or not to skip class-
Jess: Why wouldn't he be? -Yawns- I think he's in the room next door if you wanna see him though
Jess: -Laughs- Try it later, when Emma's around -Looks at Dani curiously- Just wondering, are you related to Ryan?
Jess: -Walks to the girls locker room and changes into shorts and a casual greenday T-shirt not bothering with school uniform-
(Boxes? lol) Jess: -Grins and whispers- This should scare them...Ill go back and tell them I can't find you, whilst you find somewhere good to...
Jess: apparently I'm meant to check on you.. -Smirks getting an idea and whispers- Wanna help with something?
Jess: -Gets her timetable out and sighs- Ugh, PE first
Jess: -Walks to the window- Morning Dani -Smiles at her, still half asleep-
(Okay,thanks.) Jess: -Walks towards her locker with her head down, listening to music-
Jess: -Yawns and slowly stands up- Yes sir...-Rolls her eyes and walks to the door- Uh, Where is she meant to be?
(Nooo D: Dont cheat on all your noobsAnd nice email...real mature *Insert eye roll thingy I forgot how to do*Cya Btw At anyone else in...
(Pshh, excuses excuses We all know you're in love with all the noobsStupid noobs always block me though)
(Jack what happened to quitting FF? xD And more like facedesk...)