Separate names with a comma.
(We were just talking about what a hierarchy is in English lol)
"We'll need to find her, then."
Wow...
"Now we just need to find Tanya's Prince Charming."
"Yes, but only because my mentor did it."
"Yes, actually. Took me a while to figure out that one."
Zhar smiles. "Now that's more like it."
"Just wait." He says, watching and listening intentively.
"Make a woman believe you are a circus bear. This will show quick thinking and trickery, showing me you can do well when asked questions by the...
"Now, I want you to trick a woman into believing that are a circus bear."
Zhar motioned to Tanya to come over.
"Watch for yourself."
"Use the older, plumper gentleman over by the jeweler's."
"To be honest, I noticed you right off the bat. Now, try it on someone that won't expect it, and aren't trained to spot out these kind of things."
Zhar hands her things back. "You should be more careful next time... Tanya."
"Oh, it's quite alright." He says as he picks up her things.
(Please stop saying Palad and Pal... They aren't the word used in it.)
(Who's Suni? O_o)
If everyone died, who is the narrator, and how does he know what happened when he couldn't have witnessed it?
(Kat, just continue. Ignore Sin.) Zhar continues waiting for Tanya. "She's late..."