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I agree. And the standards of this forum are kinda low... Even the crappiest story thread is full of "OMG UPDATE PLZZZZZZ!!!!!!!".
Akiko- ;She drifts back to sleep.;
Akiko- D-don' argue with Jack no more...
Akiko- ;Her eyes flutter open.; Anni?
Akiko- ;She stirs a little.;
Akiko- ;The girl is dozing now, her diary on the floor. Having overheard Jack's remarks, her face is streaked with wetness. Her stuffed toy lies...
Now.
;A caretaker notices the two arguing.; I think you guys should probably get to bed.
(Jack's horrible at arguing.)
Akiko- ;Leans forward, her head resting in her palm.;
(a small bump.)
(tell me that isn't perfection!)
(aha! THERE!)
(holy crap. He grew a beard since leaving DW. It's probably the single most attractive thing I've ever seen.)
(anybody looks bad in scrubs.)
(silly, find an image of him in his roman outfit.)
Akiko- Thanks. ;She slides into her seat, her eyes flickering about the room.;
(Matt smith isn't bad but his chin is out of control. Arthur Darvill is perfect.)
(change it to Arthur Darvill.)