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Your missing my point. Anyway, a story always hints or gives a subtle inkling as to what might happen, even early on. So if you don't give that...
It was an observation and an opinion, which I'm entitled to, get over it.
You're a bit of a tool aren't you nozzy. Why don't you just let people in instead of shutting them out like that. I understand over population...
Wtf, sorry phone buzzed out on me. You get the drift, kinda.
Where's this heading? Your updates are too short to interest people. If you don't show where this is going then you set your self up for failure....
Noooo! Don't quit!! It's a very good story, with a little adjustments here and there it can be amazing! :) keep updating please. And post on my...
Wow, absolutely amazing! Can't wait to read more. Please post on my wall when you next ypdate, thanks! :) :P
Nice beginning! :) looking forward to some character development. Bump!