Angel From Heaven

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by CallMeNoona, Nov 7, 2011.

  1. I will not be continuing Meredith as I don't have a good story plan for it  I seriously can't think of anything. I will also be finishing Something Missing sometime during this month so I've decided to write another fanfiction. This is a story sort of based off of the story of the "Mermaid and Fisherman" (some ways...) and each chapter is divided between the two characters Mikva and Kirinia. It is also based a reeeeaaaaally ling time ago! Like ancient! I hope you enjoy~!

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    Chapter 1: Heavenly Angel (Mikva)

    It was a beautiful morning. I decided to take a small detour into the Deep Woods. Maybe a bit of hunting? Maybe a bit of fishing. As I walked along the path I heard a soft and sweet voice singing. I quietly headed over to where the waterfall, Sachvie was. When I reached it I felt my heart race. A beautiful young woman was bathing in the river. She had long black hair that was plastered all down her back. She had not realized I was present. At the corner of my eye I noticed a shiny object. It looked like a necklace. I picked it up and slipped it into my robe.

    "Excuse me. Maiden?" I called out to her.

    She turned around to face me. My face dropped. Gorgeous. This woman was gorgeous. Her face angelic, pale face and warm blue eyes. Her body was amazingly shaped as well, but her face and eyes drew me in more than anything.

    "Who are you?" she asked.

    "Mikva... I am a villager from the village, Winia. I am twenty years of age. Son of Daryin. May I ask who you are?"

    "Kirinia."

    "That is all?"

    "Yes. I do not think I should get into details just for a human man like you, please leave me as you can see I am bathing," she said and she turned around again.

    Her voice captured me. A voice of an angel! Wait... human?

    "Are you not human?" I asked her.

    She turned once more.

    "Like I said. I'm not going into details for a human man like you," she said again.

    "Considering that you called my 'human' that means you are not human. Are you an angel?" I asked. "You are beautiful."

    "Thank you. But such compliments are worthless to me. I am sorry but I must ask you to leave. It is very rude to watch a woman bathe."

    "Tell me how old are you? Where are you from?"

    "Leave."

    "Alright," I said. And I left. I kept wondering what the necklace was that she had. It looked... important. I knew if she needed it she'd come find me. I knew she would want it back. Call me a sinner but I wanted to see her...
     
  2. I LOVE I LOVE

    -waits patiently for another update-
     
  3. Oh btw the chapters are 1 update!!  they are reeeaaally short!
     
  4. OMG is this the water goddess story?
     
  5. Waiting impatiently...
     
  6. Haha it's based off of some sort of folk tale... But I'm sprucing it up a bit!
     
  7. Chapter 2: The Human Man (Kirinia)

    "What? I left it right here!" I exclaimed. I lifted my robes up and checked to make sure it wasn't tucked anywhere. I looked all around on the ground, but there was no sign of the Heavenly Pendant. I looked up at the sky... without that pendant I would be unable to return home... Without that pendant I was no longer immortal... within 10 years... I would most likely die. "That man!" I shouted. "That stupid human man must've taken it!" I quickly dresses myself and headed into the woods to find this village where the human man was.

    It was nearly dark when I had come across the village of Winia. Many villagers stared upon me and I made no motion to stare back.

    "Are you lost, young lady?" asked an elderly woman.

    "No. Can you tell me where the young man, Mikva is?" I asked her. "I really need to speak with him. It's really important."

    "Why yes. He lives with his sister in the south end of the village," she said as she pointed towards a bunch of huts near the edge of the river.

    "Thank you," I said.

    I took a guess as to which house he lived and noticed him in the window talking to a woman, then leave to another room. I guessed the woman was most likely his sister as she looked just like him. I quickly made my way over to his home and opened the door.

    "Mikva! Someone is..."

    "Where is my pendant?!" I demanded. "I need it back now!" I said angrily. The woman was frightened, I could tell.

    "Pendant? I don't know of any pendant! Mikva!"

    "Kana... what is it?" asked the human man as he came into the room. When he noticed me his eyes seemed to glow as if in happiness or excitement. "You came... Kirinia! Just as I had hoped."

    "My pendant! I want it back! Give it to me!" I demanded.

    "I'm sorry. I can't do that," he said softly.

    I took out my small carving knife and rushed at him. I pinned him against the wall, my knife at his throat. "You will tell me where my pendant is!"

    "Please stop!" shouted the girl Kana. "Pleade don't! He is my only family! Please! Whoever you are! Please just leave him be!" she begged. Tears formed in her eyes and I pulled away.

    "Tell me."

    "No. I won't tell you. If you marry me and you make me happy I'll give it back," he said. A small smile forming.

    "Marry... you?"
     
  8. This is super good
     
  9. Chapter 3: Marriage (Mikva)

    Marriage to me. That is what I proposed she do if she wanted her pendant back. I didn't want her to hate me, but I didn't want her to leave me either.

    "I will not. I will never marry someone like you. You are a very rude human man and your race will soon be overruled by the angels, like me that reside in the Heavens," she said ruthlessly. She glared at me then looked and glared at Kana and left our home.

    "Mikva... who was that?" asked Kana.

    "Kirinia. My future wife," I said. "She is beautiful is she not? I fell in love with her the moment I saw her," I said quietly.

    "I do not agree. She tried to kill you! And you still want her as your wife? Mikva... I don't think that's such a good idea. Please don't do this."

    "Kana. You don't know how I feel."

    "You're right. But I know how she feels and I can tell she wants nothing to do with you?! Why don't you marry someone who will love you? Like... me?" she said blushing.

    "I'm sorry Kana, but I don't love you the way I love Kirinia. If I didn't know Kirinia maybe I would love you," I said and I smiled at her. "Love you sis," I said and I left the house.

    "Kirinia!" I shouted after her.

    When she saw me she ran. She ran towards the woods. And I quickly ran after her. I watched as she ran through the trees. She was running towards Ferrar Cliff. We were getting nearer and nearer and I watched she realized the cliff and tried to stop. She accidentally tripped and fell off.

    "KIRINIA!!" I screamed and I dove off the cliff. I grabbed her in my arms in mid air and held onto her. We fell into the lake below the cliff. As we came up and back onto the ground I grabbed her and kissed her soft lips.
     
  10. Bump!!! 
     
  11. Too awesome. You must continue! Bump!!!
     
  12. Chapter 4: Agreement (Kirinia)

    The kiss was not as long as I expected. When he broke away I only grimaced. "Don't do that again!" I told him. I was furious.

    "Please accept my proposal," he said. "Just marry me, I will provide you with everything you need."

    "I... can't," I said. "It's not possible," I said firmly.

    "Why not?"

    "I am already married. In the Heavens I am married to a wonderful man, I need to return to him and my children... Please... just give back my pendant! I want to see them you selfish human!" I cried.

    "I can't let you go!" he cried and he threw his arms around me. He held me close to him and I tried to free myself. "If you marry me... I'll return the pendant. But only after our first child is born... and when you fall in love with me."

    My eyes widened and I felt a sudden hatred towards this man. "So if I do that you will let me go back home?" I asked, clearing things up.

    "Yes. You can return to your family, and back to the Heavens. Just realize something. This is going to take years, are you willing to go through all that trouble just to go back?"

    "I will do anything to be able to see my children again," I whispered.

    "Good," he said and he started walking out of the water onto the grassy land.

    To tell the truth... I had no husband. I had no children and I had never been in love. I was hoping he would sympathize and give back my pendant... but I was underestimating him. This human man was smart. He really knew how to manipulate someone into doing something they didn't want... I was going to regret my decision, definitely...