Come Again?

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by PhiaD-D-Doll, Nov 6, 2011.

  1. REWRITE!!!!!
    different story, same basic plot.




    Sam followed his mom upstairs, like she asked.
    He had just turned 5, and he loved to tell people.
    "momma, why are we up here?" he said, with an almost inaudible lisp.
    "because, Sam, you're going to stay up here for a while..."
    "why, momma?"
    "that's enough questions." Sam's mom, Chloe, snapped at him.
    Chloe pushed Sam into an attic room, and she shut and locked the door behind her.
    "Momma!" Chloe could barely hear Sam from the other side of the door.
    Chloe breathed out in one big huff.
    She was not happy for what would have to happen next...

    ***

    Chloe waited until she was sure Sam had fallen asleep to return to the attic of her large house.
    She opened the door, and Sam was laying infront of a window.
    Chloe quietly walked forwards, pulling out a rope as she went.
    Sam turned in his sleep.
    Chloe froze, and waited until he stopped moving to advance.
    "He won't pay for it any more..." Chloe didn't realize she was mumbling as she finally got to Sam. "He thinks you're mine, and I couldn't bare to live without it..." Chloe's eyebrow twitched, and she put the rope around the five year old's neck and pulled, stopping his breath.
    She stayed like that for a full five minutes before moving, picking up Sam's body and carrying him downstairs to a pre-dug pit on the edge of her father's property.
    "giving you up means sanity." she said, kissing his forehead and wiping her tears before tossing his body into the ditch, before picking up a shovel and filling up the hole again.
    "I'd rather have Andrew then you." Chloe said, running back to the house, where she could pretend everything was alright.

    ***

    Cody quickly set the table for breakfast.
    He was running late, and he could only hope that Eagle or Chloe had slept in late. He didn't have to worry about Master, because he always came down ten minutes after breakfast had officially started.
    To Cody's luck, it was Sebastian who came downstairs, already in his school uniform, first.
    "Hey, Seb." Cody smiled at his favorite boss and continued with the table.
    "Hey. Running late, eh, Cody?" Sebastian smirked. His favorite part of the day was being around Cody, who he was going to ask to be his personal servant.
    "my alarm clock stopped working. But shh, Eagle could-"
    "Eagle could what?" Eagle was Sebastian's older brother. Eagle disliked Cody with a passion.
    He saw Cody as an annoying pest, as he did with all his servants in the house.
    "Eagle could sit down and shut up." Sebastian almost commanded him. "Cody, do you know what's for breakfast?"
    "Poached egg on toast with rosemary, Chloe is on a diet."
    "damn, I'm hungry. I'm going out for breakfast, come on, Bassy." Eagle said as Sebastian trailed behind him.
    Cody sighed.
    Chloe would already be grumpy because of her diet, eating alone would make it worse.
    And he hated dealing with Chloe.
     
  2. Bump.
    I take the time to rewrite my story and no one wants it?
    Mmkay...
     
  3. Omg hey I love it so far.
    I dont go here much  so idk the original story
     


  4. Am I still that Chloe...? ;n;

    Dattebanette... </3
     
  5. Eagles back!! :O 
     
  6. Exactly, eagle :D