I was dragged into the court room and thrown in front of the judge "u are convicted of mass murder and arson" he said "what do u have to say for urself?" "do ur worst" "u are sentenced to exile onto the island past the horizon" he said as his gabble came crashing down I was interrogated to see if I was covering something up but I rejected. I was flung on a boat and shipped away. I was hit on the head and blacked out… I woke to see myself on an island w/ strangers circled around me. I explained who I was and they were very understanding. I met Natasha Natalie Veronica casey and many others.
Great job so far. One note however, try not to use abbreviations. It's just makes it easier on your readers of you spell out "you" instead of using "u"
Later ,after I was settled in, Bridget louis calkhen and fox Wulson came back to the camp. They had supplies in their arms and cuts all over. "what could of done those cuts?" I asked. "we're not alone here" louis explained We all ate our dinner in silence and (even though I didnt show it) I was getting scared. We all sat round the fire telling our bravest stories and bridgets were by far the best. She told tales of bats and ghouls sneaking behind her. She said how she killed 2 feathered monsters w\ her own hands.
I heard a russling in the bushes and a screech. I edged closer leaving the gang behind. Only a few noticed me missing and wandered off looking for me. Natasha, casey and fox were in the forest looking. Then something scratched my face. It blended perfectly with the trees. I wiped the blood from my cheek and stumbled away. Nothing seemed to follow me as I ran away. Natasha --who was still searching-- finally found me. We all returned to camp but everyone else was asleep. In the night I heard the noise again. Only this time I saw two blazing red eyes…
The next day I woke w/ suddenly like I had a bad dream. I clambered out my tent to see breakfast waiting for me. I sat down and fox said he saw something strange last night. "when I was looking for owen I saw to gazing red eyes, I stared in shock and then they disappeared" he said. I remembered the eyes I saw in the middle of the night. I was now really scared. Later it only got worse. I was sent on my first supply run along with Louis Veronica and casey. We entered the forest not knowing what to expect. At first it was just a couple of ghosts and trolls. When we found a good food source we stopped for a break. Then I noticed the eyes staring at Louis…