The Air Around Me

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by pixie-stick, Aug 24, 2011.

  1. Update soon...

    Maybe tonight, maybe now... Maybe NEVAR 
     
  2. Nice Story pixie Keep going Bad News No more writer next door
     
  3. I let out a tiny scream as I looked up, and Daniella gave me that sinister smile that I knew so well. Adrenaline and fear rushed through me. I jumped up and ran towards the Forrest of trees on the other end of the meadow as I tried so hard not to let Daniella capture me again.
    She was quickly gaining on me, but I knew that I was about to enter the Forrest that i knew like the back of my hand, and she was lost instantly. I just ran in the direction of Mia's house. I knew in my heart that neither of us had long, Daniella wasnt someone that you could avoid. Worried tears ran down my face, but my only goal was to warn Mia. Soon my heavy sprint slowed as I realized that I had lost Daniella. I ran up mia's long driveway and threw open her door, not even stopping to see if Mrs. Peter's was home. She was used to me coming over unexpected anyways. I threw her door open and said, "She found us. Pack your things, we must leave now." I knew that Mia wanted to tell her parents and the police, but she knew as well as I that we just can't. We can't indanger loved ones that way. They didn't even know that we had been kidnapped, they still to this day thought that we were nasty little spoiled children that had run away from this privileged life on purpose. I wish that they could know the truth. I helped her throw anything valuable into her bag; a waterbottle, some jackets and blankets, a twinky, and anything else that was easy to pack. She threw her things out of the open window, and then jumped, With me right behind her.

    Sorry for grammar mistakes, etc. Enjoy!
     
  4. Wopoooooo!!!! Nice Job but we all make mistake. Writer next door gone Blitz Genesis Here
     
  5. Thanks so you like it??
    And ok I will check it out
     
  6. Yea pixie it's good
     
  7. Any other readers? :(
    My first fanfic fails
     
  8. Wow. Looks like I am writing to my self. Might as well just transfer it into my notes...
     
  9. Hey! I'm reading iti shld say the same thing to my story. Mine sucks. Anyway don't u dare stop younglady!!
     
  10. Update plz!!!!!!!
     
  11. Mia and I took off running, sensing with that sense that only kidnapped children fully develop; that sense of being followed. I knew that Daniella was on our trail. "This way!" I pulled Mia down a sharp turn on the woodsy path that we were following. I was so afraid. I didn't want to show Mia, because we both knew that she was the weaker (emotionally) of the two of us. My steps were quick, sharp and shaky.

    A FEW HOURS LATER

    Me and Mia had finally found somewhere to settle down for the night. We were pros at hiding well, and instincts told us to hide up high. We climbed an oak and slept on a fat branch that night.
    Luckily for us, the birds and piercing sunlight woke us up in the morning. We woke at the same time, so we threw down our things and climbed back down. Again we were on the run.
    Once we were at a place where we fell confident enough to sit down and see if there was any food to satisfy our stomachs in Mia's bag, we began to eat a normal meal and have a conversation about where to go next. Right as things started feeling right enough to laugh, a pudgy hand came from behind the trees and covered our mouths. We tried to shriek, but all we could do was look at each other in terror. We heard a raspy laugh. We had been caught again.

    Like it? It will get better in the next few updates.
     
  12. wow this is really good!!!  definitely better than my first fanfic!!!! 