one day daisy was walkin to school when she saw him. Jake the star quaterback of the school football team. She sighed deeply just wishin he could be all hers.
But of course he didnt even know her name. She was a loser. She wished to be a cheerleader so she could have Jake all to her self
She walked up to Jake and said heyy he just looked at her and said do i know u?? and daisy was heart broken she thought he remember her name from the last time they talked but of course he didnt
she said "im daisy, from sixth period" he looked down at her (because he was a lot taller then her) he said "well hi daisy are u new to this school??" she was sad when she said "no i have been here since freshman year and we are seniors" he was still confused "well thats cool i guess i need to go to football practice now" he jogged to the field and daisy walked slowly and sadly.
@Foxymama He's right. Make them long, because ammature paragraphs like that, make your story stupid. It makes them to noobish for people to actually read. Don't tell the correct person to shuttup, when you don't know what your doing. ]£$$
I don't want to read it cuz it's so unorganised, it makes it seem almost childish, go back, and rewrite it all and maybe I'll read it... I'm gonna be honest, it's too sloppy Constructive critisism