gangsters paridise

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *__supermonkey__ (01), Aug 5, 2011.

  1. (PROLAGUE)
    I run a gang called the Razz.we are feared through out the country. we live for the blood and money. are signature weapon is a golden ak47. and i run it all.

    (CHAPTER 1)

    "Alright everybody u ready" i said. "hell yah" said damien 1 of the leutenants of our gang."ok lets do this" said my sister sophie. "ryan get in the car" i yelled. as ryan got in i told sophie to drive us to the bank.this would be our biggest robbery yet.




    should
    i continue? i dont think its good. -and i know its short ill continue if u guys
    want
     
  2. Plz do I'm included it'll only get better but don't be afraid to be more descriptive make us be able to see what you see