@Kitten @TheSeductress

Discussion in 'Off Topic' started by ChocolateThunder, Dec 16, 2017.

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  1. Let it be a fact.
    Count the syllables.
    My brain is intact.
    I'm incredible.

    See the rhyme pattern?
    I'm high off of life,
    Higher than Saturn.
    The cash is my wife.

    Someone tell kitten,
    This is well written.
    Give me some feedback.
    I got back on track.

    They say it got old.
    Change the rhyme scheme.
    I just did it, yo.
    Put it in a meme.

    Anything else to say?
    Don't rhyme every word,
    So it's done this way.
    It's five syllables.

    Open up your eyes.
    Remember I'm me.
    Endless like the sea,
    Describes my rhymes, B.

    Back to what I do.
    Glad that this is through.
    As they requested,
    I did something new.
     
  2. 5 syllables each line. Rhyme scheme changed as well. Made in a short amount of time as well
     
  3. you clearly know nothing about flow if you think my criticism meant "make every single line the exact same amount of syllables so it reads boring asf"
     
  4. I wanna say it's good, but I need to hear a beat to it. Otherwise, its just another poem
     
  5. Using ABAB, ABBB, AABB a lot isn't that much better... ???
     
  6. I know everything about flow. Can you be more specific next time? :lol: Do you want me to use the same amount of syllables or switch it up? I'm confused, when you don't be specific enough. I mean, I thought I'd be funny to just use five syllables the entire time since you assumed I ain't kno how to balance em.
     
  7. @TheSeductress you got what you wanted :roll:
     
  8. This is about as groovy as a steam train rolling over tracks
     
  9. you clearly don't, because everything you post is a mess
     
  10. Crappy thread. No support
     
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  12. Go back to SoundCloud normie.
     
  13. I clearly do. I bet if I gave you a ball of yarn you'd cheer up :roll:
     
  14. You support a lot of bad things, therefore no support from you is a great thing. Thank you
     
  15. Something groovy? Easy.
     
  16. Do I look like someone who would waste my time on dat app, where trash rappers get famous? No, ok then
     
  17. Crappy thread. No support
     
  18. Support
     
  19. Here you go yet again. You desperately need a way to have even a fraction of significance so you do tedious, petty interactions wit me, such as this. Don't you have some customers lined up outside your cave? How do you have a WiFi connection all the way out there in the mountains, Alicia? I know you cavemen made some essential inventions, but damn, you're inna roll.
     
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