Part 1 "It was love, n0thing else" The Girl's(Any) wish "I Wish for that day, when we'll be together, building a glass house by a small lake with grasses everywhere, a place where the moon and star shines the brightest in the night sky, where we can walk barefoot on the soft green grass, holding hands, before we close our eyes, i'll wish when the wishing star passes the horizon in the night sky that no matter how hard the situation is, we will never be apart " ️ Anya's POV- (Walking to and fro in her room, typing something in her phone) "Ohhh...what do i do nw? I mesSed it up! I've to make up by saturday, Ugh...today is thursday!! Oh n0!" (From another room) Anya's m0m- "Sweety...whom are you talking to?" Anya jerk when she heard her m0m calling and saying... Anya: (trying to calm herself) "Ahh...M0M..its..its n0 one..." (Shaking voice) Oh..Anya! Can't u lie better? Now m0ms gonna investigate why i'm like this" says Anya whispering to herself. (she closes her eyes tightly and murmured something) After 2 minutes. KN0CK! KN0CK! Anya's Mom-"Can you open the door dear?" Anya-(freaks ouT)" Ahh...3 minutes m0m!" Anya's Mom-"Ahkhey...I'll come back afterwards...um maybe...after an hour!" Anya-"I'll be waiting m0m..." "Whew..." Anya breaths out and roll her eyes, but the m0ment she remember the incident that happened at school, she began to worry again. -In School- Anya sat beside a window, deep in thought... After a minute or two, Jully steps in the class, scanning the classroom like some kind of detecting device....Beep! Beep! Her scanning stops when she notice Anya looking outside the window, smiles michieviously, she walks up to Anya and then tip toe her steps when she got near... Jully-"BANG!!"(Anya jumps up from her sitting place) Anya-(Shaking, her hands in her bossom, breathing quickly, turns around and looks at Jully with wide eyes)"Why do you do that for?" Jully-"You didn't notice me coming so i decided to surprise you" (Jully smiles like she had accomplish some type of mission) Anya-(frowns a bit) "You call that as a surprise? Then here's a surprise punch for you!" (punches Jully on her arm, giggling a bit) Jully-"Ouch! You hit like a baby" (smile at Anya and pulls Anya chick which was becoming pink) Anya-"OW! That hurts, stop it!" Jully-"AWW...Who's the pinkbaby?"(Jully makes a duckface while saying it) Anya-"Wait till i hit you and turn you into bluebaby!"(Jully runs while Anya chase her, both giggling) to be continue..
Hi! Just my two cents. Please refrain from using ellipsis (...) I would suggest replacing it with an action like "words" action "words" and describing the sounds like the bang; "...an ear-shattering noise caught my attention." Over all, your story is nice. Definitely going to read it! Keep it up!