Good. Maybe grammar improvement? And some spellcheck help might be good. Nice story. Yet there was a lot of cussing.
He turns away, he stand up, then he ask 'as creepy as it is I still need to went there for my work report, do you know anybody that can guide me there?' Allie and Mickayla look at each other and answer 'Deputy Nyla' 'btw you better called her Nash or she will piss off' add Allie. 'That is so cute of her' say Mikayla. They both laugh. With a smile Kush told them 'ok then, i will go to the sheriff office after this' then he walk away to the door and leave those two girl alone. When the door is closed Allie and Mikayla sit infront of each other as Mikayla reads out her tarot reading... Need more material
U added the others.. What bout me? We know ima ginger with lime green eyes and light freckles in the stories, but imma actually a brunette with violet damn eyes
U got space for more Characters Kuch ? If so May I be in it: Jennifer 18 Blondie hair blue eyes Part: If any r open You choose Traits: Flirty
'That guy had a bad reading, the fool, the hangman, and the devil ' as Mikayla show the card, Allie can only look with a sad eyes as Kush is sure to be dead... Meanwhile, in the Sheriff office, Mayor Brandon and Sheriff Johny had been locked inside the discussion room leaving Deputy Nash on duty. Occationally Deputy Nash can hear sound of banging on the table and shout from both of them. As she tries to eavedroping on them Kush walks in. They greet eash other, with a stern but lovely voice Deputy Nash ask if Kuch need her assitance. He then told her his intension to go at the outskirt to make a evaluation. With a big smile she stands up, grap her gear and with loud voice she inform the Sheriff be leaving the office. Deputy Nash really love misteries, and creepy stuff its just her deepest wish for someone to ask her to go to the forest or outskirt. When the just came out from the door, Kush heard a giggle of a girl nearby, then suddenly a girl around 12 years old, with pale complexion, deep green eyes, her long black silky hair to the waist, she wearing a white dress, black shoe, and on the right hand she hold her Teddy bear with black eyes and grizzly brown fur. She then stop and give a dead look in her eyes as she stand next to Deputy Nash. 'Good morning Elena' say Deputy Nash. Elena look Nash in the eye and gave a creepy smile then walk away to the forest while giggle away and dragging her Teddy. A chill run down his back as he watch Elena and Nash convo and at the same time mesmerize by Nash for showing no fear... Kush try to ask about Elena more but get stop as Nash just walk to her jeep and calling him in.. Then they drove-off
Its ok if you do I dont want an important part but just enough so that I am in there some of the time if you do have room for more and you want to put me in