ONCE UPON A TIME THERE WAS A DUDE NAMED DARREN AND DARREN WANTED TO BECOME A ROCK STAR BUT DARREN WAS THA LEADER OF THE RACE KNOWN AS "YOLO" AND THEY WERE IN WAR AGAINST THE RACE KNOWN AS "SWAG" HOWEVER, NO ONE DARED TO ATTACK EACH-OTHER, THUS DARREN DECIDED TO VISIT HIS FRIEND ALEX FROM TARGET. "YO, ALEX, LETS FORM A ROCK BAND, WE WILL SING ABOUT HOW WE DON'T FEEL ANYTHING AND HOW LIFE SUCKS AND HOW NO ONE UNDERSTANDS US!!" DARREN TOLD ALEX,BEFORE HE CONTINUED, "TEENAGE KIDS WILL EAT IT UP, AND WE'LL BE RICH!!" SO ALEX NODDED, "BRO, I LOVE YOU!!!" AND SO ALEX AND DARREN ALONG WITH A COUPLE OF RANDOM DUDES FORMED A BAND CALLED "EVIL MEETS BAD" AND EVIL MEETS BAD SUCKED ASS! BUT THEY DID NOT GIVE UP, THEY WOULD MAKE IT TO THE TOP EVEN IF THEY HAD TO KISS ASS AND SELL OUT. THEY WERE ABOUT TO LOSE HOPE WHEN ALEX TOLD DARREN, "BRO! BRO! I DID IT!! MY UNCLE WHO OWNS A CLUB DECIDED TO LET US PLAY OUR CRAPPY MUSIC IF WE WASH HIS CAR FOR A MONTH!!!" DARREN WAS HAPPY, "BRO!! WE WILL MAKE IT BIG, I KNOW IT!!" THEY BUMPED FISTS AND ALEX WENT TO GO TELL HIS UNCLE THAT THEY WOULD PLAY!! THE DAY CAME, DARREN AND THE BAND WERE AT THE CLUB: BUT THERE WAS ONLY 4 PEOPLE IN THE FREAKING CLUB. "BRO! THERE ARE ONLY 4 PEOPLE HERE! WHAT THE HELL?!!!" DARREN SNAPPED AT ALEX WHO WHISPERED, "UH.. BRO, THERE MUST BE A MUSIC PRODUCER HERE!! THEY COME TO CLUBS LIKE THIS ALL THE TIME... ALL WE HAVE TO DO IS DO OUR BESTT!" "Y-YOU'RE RIGHT!" DARREN AGREED, AS HE POINTED AT A GUY IN A FANCY BLACK SUIT, "THAT DUDE IN A BLACK SUIT LOOKS LIKE A MUSIC PRODUCER!! WE GOTTA DO THIS!!" AND SO EVIL MEETS BAD, PLAYED... HOWEVER UNKNOWN TO THEM THE DUDE IN THE BLACK SUIT WAS IN FACT A HOMELESS DUDE WHO GOT FIRED FROM WORK AND THEN CHEATED ON BY HIS WIFE, SO HE WAS DROWNING HIMSELF IN BOOZE! ANYHOO, DARREN AND ALEX ONLY HAD WRITTEN ONE SONG CALLED "BABY" AND EVEN THOUGH IT WAS THE ONLY SONG THEY HAD IN THEIR SONG ARSENAL: THEY PLAYED IT FOR 3 FREAKING HOURS. "BOO! YOU SUCK!!! "YOU'VE BEEN PLAYING THE SAME CRAP FOR 4 HOURS, GIVE IT UP!!" DARREN AND ALEX ALONG WITH THE RANDOM DUDES IN THEIR BAND STOPPED PLAYING AS EVERYONE BOO'D THEM AND LEFT. "YES! WE TOTALLY ROCKED IT BRO!!" DARREN TOLD ALEX AS THEY FIST BUMPED! THEY JUMPED OFF OF THE STAGE AS AN OLD MAN WALKED TOWARDS THEM, "YO, YOUR BAND SUCKED ASS... BUT I WANNA GIVE YOU TO PLAY UNDER MY RECORD LABEL, I'LL MAKE YOU SO BIG AND FAMOUS!!" "R-REALLY?!" DARREN WAS SHOCKED. "Y-YEAH! WE SUCK ASS, WHY WOULD YOU WANT US?!" ALEX ASKED, THE OLD MAN. "WELL, WHEN YOU SING... YOU LADIES SOUND LIKE LITTLE BOYS WHO HAVEN'T HIT PUBERTY... BUT.. YOU GOT LOOKS! AND GIRLS THESE DAYS ARE SHALLOW, YOU TALENTLESS LOSERS, ALL YOU HAVE TO DO IS SIT THERE AND LOOK PRETTY, AND YOU WILL MAKE BIG BUCKS!!" THE OLD MAN GRINNED AT THEM. ALEX AND DARREN KNEW... THEY KNEW IT WAS WRONG! THEY WERE TALENTLESS! OUT THERE, THERE WAS SOMEONE WORKIN HARD TO MAKE IT BIGGER... AND HERE THEY WERE, GETTIN IT EASY! WAS IF FAIR?! NO IT WAS NOT! BUT THIS WAS THEIR DREAM!! SO DARREN AND ALEX AGREED!! WEEKS WENT BY AND THE BAND BECAME THE MOST POPULAR BAND IN THE WORLD, SO BIG THEY WERE ASKED TO PLAY AT THE FAMOUS STAGE KNOWN AS "THE STAGE OF ROCKSTAR HEROES!" ONLY THE BEST OF THE BEST PLAYED THERE! BANDS LIKE "DIRECTION ONE!" THEY WOULD NOT PASS UP THIS OFFER. "MARCH 7 YOU GUYS PLAY AT THE STAGE OF ROCK STAR HEROES AT 8 PM, GOT IT DARREN AND ALEX?!!!" THEIR BOSS TOLD EM. BOTH NODDED EXCITEDLY AS THEY HEADED HOME HOWEVER... MEANWHILE DARREN WAS FOCUSED ON THE BAND. CRAP WAS BREWING BETWEEN BOTH "YOLO" AND "SWAG" SOOOO, DARREN'S ADVISOR WHO WAS ALSO HIS FATHER TOLD DARREN, "SON, WE HAVE TO ERADICATE THOSE "SWAG" OFF OF THE WORLD, SO WE WILL ATTACK EM UNDER YOUR COMMAND!!" DARREN NOT WANTING TO DISAPPOINT HIS DAD, ASKED, "WHEN DO WE ATTACK?!" "HEHE, MARCH 7 AT 8 PM, SON!! THEY WILL BE READY SO WE HAVE TO PRPEARE!" DARREN'S DEAD PATTED HIS SON'S HEAD AS HE WALKED AWAY. DARRENS WORLD SHATTERED ON THAT MOMENT. THE SAME DAY HE WAS GONNA PLAY IN THE STAGE OF ROCKSTAR HEROES, HE HAD A DUTY TO HIS RACE, LIFE WAS A CRUEL BABE! HIS DREAMS VS HIS DUTY. HE HAD TO PICK ONE... GO PLAY WITH HIS BAND OR ATTACK THE "SWAG" RACE. SO, DARREN DID WHAT ANY MAN WOULD. HE WENT OVER TO ALEX'S HOUSE. "BRO.. SORRY I QUIT THE BAND!" DARREN TOLD ALEX. "WHAT?!! YOU CAN'T QUIT! YOU GOTTA BE KIDDIN ME!" ALEX YELLED. "I'M NOT, I MADE UP MY MIND... I HAVE A DUTY AS LEADER OF MY RACE! GO ON! PLAY WITHOUT MEE!" DARREN STATED, AS HE LOOKED AWAY. "DAMN YOU!" ALEX YELLED, AS HE PUNCHED DARREN'S JAW. DARREN FELL BACK AND ALEX YELLED, "THIS WAS MY DREAM! YOUR DREAM! SCREW YOUR DUTY!!!!!" "HMPH, WHATEVER..." DARREN SAID AS HE GOT UP AND WALKED AWAY. THE DAY FINALLY CAME.... MARCH 7 HAD COME: IT WAS 7:50 AND DARREN WAS ON A BATTLEFIELD WITH HIS RACE THE "YOLO" HE WAS ON A JET... READY TO GIVE ORDERS. ACROSS FROM THEN WAS THE "SWAGS" THEY WOULD ATTACK IF THE "YOLO" ATTACKED FIRST!! THIS BATTLE WOULD CHANGE EVERYTHING. 7:51 7:52 7:53 TIME SEEMED TO BE GOING SLOW FOR DARREN. AND HE WONDERED WHAT HIS BAND EVIL MEETS BAD WAS DOING. "YO, BOSS, AT YOUR COMMAND WE WILL ATTACK!!" DARREN HEARD HIS SOLDIERS SAY. SCREW IT! DARREN STARTED UP THE JET HE WAS IN AND FLEW OFF TO THE STAGE OF ROCKSTAR HEROES! THATS WHAT HE WANTED TO DO!! ----------- "HA! I KNEW YOU'D COME!" ALEX GRINNED, AS DARREN STOOD IN FRONT OF HIM: IT WAS 7:59. "WOULDN'T MISS THIS FOR THE WORLD!" DARREN GRINNED, AS THEY FIST BUMPED, BEFORE THEY BEGAN PLAYING. THAT NIGHT DARREN AND THE BAND PLAYED TIL THE SUN ROSE... HOWEVER, NO ONE WOULD KNOW THIS... BUT DARREN BY CHOOSING TO DITCH HIS DUTY, HE HAD SAVED THE WORLD.. THE "YOLO" RETREATED THE BATTLEFIELD WHERE THE "SWAGS" WERE. IF THE WAR HAD STARTED THAT NIGHT... THEY WOULD OF WIPED OUT THE WORLD IN THE PROCESS OF WAR. YES, A MAN WHO CHOSE TO PLAY WITH HIS CRAPPY BAND, INSTEAD OF GOING TO WAR... SAVED THE WORLD... and no one would ever know. That is the power of choice, baby.
My eyes are burning, but it's like an icy-hot pleasurable burn, I rate this 2 Detroit "ladies" out of 5.
I like how incorporated a message behind a what seems to be immature story. You taught the readers not only to live up to their dreams but also that a little decision can go a long way. If I were to critique anything, I'd say to stick to one setting. The story took place in modern time until the near end when you stated the battle was going to take place and a bunch of teenage boys were going to wreck to world. Sounds like you transported back in time to world war II. Other than that the story was off the chains. Make sure your girlfriend reads the bit where you describe what about girl is.
He is better. And he only drank in his later days because of depression, which was never treated back then