This is a poem I wrote and I just want to see what you all guys think. It's a personal poem so yeah... Me I'm a player and a cheat... I'm a liar I'm just so greatful I'm not a thief. No one knows my pain but everyone knows my face... The biggest player of the Human face. I've said I'm sorry a million times but it's was just a lie so you'd give me another try.... There's things that I have done that I can never turn away from. The feeling of guilt and the feeling of regret that haunts me when ever I open or close my eyes... No one knows the pain that is deep inside... The feeling of hate and the feeling of anger that is bottled up inside just wanting to explode... But I keep it on hold. hoping one day the right one would come along and sews my pain... My anger... My sadness and depression. I wait and wait and wait for nothing to come... And I realized that it's my fault for why everything is collapsing around me. I realized that there's a reason for everything. And there's a purpose for everything and mistakes are made for a better future... Even if it ends up hurting me... But I'm trying to expel all my anger and all my hate so I can consume love and happiness. I'm a soulless man with no where to go...I'm trying to find my place but it's not easy to find when all I have is an empty space...An empty space waiting to be filled with my future that is waiting to be built. But there's nothing to construct... there's nothing to be put together there's nothing that can form my future besides me. I am the only one that can construct the future that is held in the hands of time and patience. Thanks for taking the time to read. I deeply appreciate all of yalls comments and opinions.
I like it well what I read which was half and like someone said would've been better if you'd broke it up a little bit so that it is easier to read
Yeah I should of broken it up lol first poem I've ever wrote so I didn't know to break it up to make it easier to read lol
Honestly, i think it was pretty good. I also agree it should have been broken up. Other then that it was really good. Nice writing.
Man I love when people on here write poetry, poetry is life. As many people said, all it needs is a structure but other than that I loved it