CreepyPasta Verse.... Chapter 1

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Red_Rose_DraGon, Aug 21, 2014.

  1. Yeah more + secret one pls
     
  2. Hey, Sinatra, do yo watch slenderverse by the way? As in Marble Hornets and Tribetwelve and on?
     
  3. ๎ง๎„†yes! Please post it!
     
  4. SECRET STORY! - The classroom
    "What is wrong with you?" I growled as she held Lance up against the wall.
    "Absolutely nothing Rya," he said smirking, "I only want what the others cannot have."
    "You... Will not... Hurt Melody again..." I snarled as her grip on his shirt tightened.
    "Who said I want to hurt her?" he growled at her, "I happen to like her. I want to stake my claim."
    "You will not claim anything Lance... Or should I say.... Masky," I hissed.
    Tim aka Masky glared at me.
    "Melody will be mines Keeper. She will not belong to anyone else."
    "She does not belong to you Tim. Find another. Melody is too sweet. Too innocent. Too.... Human for the likes of any of you."
    Masky came face to face with Rya, staring her down with a great blazing look in his eyes.
    "I will claim her as my own."
    I moved so quickly, I caught him in a choke hold, with her hand around his neck squeezing his throat. He gagged as he gripped her hand.
    "I will kill you," I breathed in his face before releasing him.
    I started walking away as he leaned against the wall and coughed.
    "You... Can't.... Slender Man.... Will... Be... Angry... With you..." he breathed each word.
    I stopped and turned to look at him.
    "I could care less about Slender Man..." I said, "I am not one of his.... Proxies."
    "You used to be," he said staring her in the eye.
    Before he knew it, I had him pinned against the wall. I brought her fist to his face, but intentionally missed and hit the wall beside his head cracking the wall. Masky froze with his eyes widened in fear
    . "You better watch yourself Tim..." I growled, her tone deadly, "I am not afraid to kill Slender Man's favorite pet."
    "Rya that's enough," Pen said walking up behind me, "you scared him more than enough."
    "I agree," Pam said, "we have to find Melody."
    I looked over my shoulder at them for just a second before looking back at Masky. I growled once more before moving away from him and heading out the door with Pen and Pam falling behind
    me...........

    The End..... For now.....
     
  5. Isn't this claimed for her own, I'm sure I know this.
     
  6. Quick no brainer. Who wants Melody and Lance together?
     
  7. P.S I knoe there areva few mistakes, but just bear with me
     
  8. Lance has Melody weak in the knees lol but I think they would make a good couple. Loving this story and the secret story too :)
     
  9. Cool. The Secret story is for another story.... the star being Rya
     
  10. Hey guys, my sister is doing the next chapter and you get to choose what it should be about. So lets hear your ideas!!!!
     
  11. Cool idea. Hmm, I wanna hear what will happen between Lance and Melody now. Melody's dad is interesting, maybe more about him.
     
  12. Sounds good. I'll tell her
     
  13. Who wants another secret story
     
  14. I'm really liking this so far!
     
  15. Nice. It's open chapter for 8. So we would like to hear your ideas for it
     
  16. Im lost whats different between creepy pasta and secret story
     
  17. Other than the paragraphing and the spelling(which I assume is because you are too lazy to check through), there's one major problem.

    I noticed your POV is not constant. One second, 'I' did it, and the next, Rya.
     
  18. @Olabisi the difference is that the CreepyPasta is Melody's story and the secret story is piece of Rya's story. @Yuuki yeah. My bad. I was sleeping on myself when I did it. Just bear with me on that. I'm really trying on this
     
  19. I want them together.๎’ They seem like they would be an interesting couple.