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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by OkamiLife, Aug 13, 2014.

  1. Ok so I edited me story and I goes my out all enjoy plz leave tips or comment and spread the word




    Interspace

    December 31st, 2029, New Years.

    A new age has begun people have advance in technologysince the year 2000. It has been 11 years since the incident occurred. This is the story of those fought to seek the truth and rebelled against the government. My name is Axel, I am 15 years old and I have joined I.S., the rebellion.

    Chapter 1:

    Reunion

    And

    Meetings

    "I knew this was going to be an adventure Drak," Axel said.

    "Yeah yeah Axel, just remember there is no turning back now," Drak said.

    Drak and Axel arrive at the entrance. A dark alley way with a graffiti wall facing them. As Drak walks to the Axel looks at my wondering what he's going to do. S he places his on the bottom corner of the yellow A on the wall a hatch open up and a bright light appears showing a crowded group of people in a shopping area. Drak is amazed at what he is seeing.

    "This is the shopping district Axel"

    "Hey um Drak?" Axel looks at Drak.

    "What is it Axel?"

    Axel holds his family's picture.

    "Don't be sorry you have now you meet friends that are like family here, I know you miss them but you have you move on."

    As they both step through the entrance and look around the shopping district. Axel sees his childhood friend Sayla.

    "Sayla is that you?!?!"

    Sayla looks at Axel and screams with joy, she starts to run to him and tackles him. As they fall down to on the hard steel ground Drak laughs.

    "Oh my God Axel I haven't seen you since your parents......died."

    "It's ok Sayla I've moved on from that, starting today I'm a recruit at the academy."

    Axel smiles and hugs her.

    "Well then guess I'll be seeing you there."

    "Wait you're in the academy too Sayla?"

    Sayla smiles and stands up and gives Axel a hand.

    "Yup I joined last week."

    "Hey Sayla show Axel to the dormitories and find him a roommates." Drak says and walks off.

    She Grabs Axel by his arm and drags him down the market to the academy. Axel look at the bright bronze and platinum building.

    "First we got to get you registered, so come on."

    As they walk into the academy and head to main office. Axel fills out a couple of reforms to get registered. They walk out the academy and head to the dorms. Axel receives his keys pass and it says Z482.

    "Hey can you help me find my room" Axel shows her his key pass.

    "Ok follow me, Axel what are you going to train for at the academy."

    "I don't know yet, I'll find out when I go there tomorrow."

    Sayla waves her down the motion sensor control a gravity pad 5x3 descends, as they get on she calls out:

    "5th floor please."

    When they get out Axel looks around the isolated but peaceful hallway, he sees a plant pot with a small palm tree and a picture of the creator of Interspace. Sayla walks to room Z482 and looks at him with a smile.

    "Hey guess what Axel?"

    "What is it?"

    Sayla takes out her key pass; she uses it on the lock and opens the door. A dark solid gray room with burgundy couches and a hover center piece table appear with a holographic 3d tv projects from the wall and shows the news in New York . Axel looks at her and is shocked

    "We're going to be roommates!!!!!"

    "Huh...."

    Axels looks pale at Sayla as his heart skips a beat.

    She giggles."You heard me"

    Axel facepalms"Super...."
     
  2. hope you all enjoy sry typos