This is my first good feedback please -。-。-。-。-。-。-。-。-。-。-。-。-。-。-。 "Are you serious is this what it takes to be popular?" I said as I looked at a revealing outfit " its just a half shirt with short shorts Sophie. Uhh how else are we gonna get boys?" Prissy questioned I looked at the outfit " this isn't me " I thought to myself " But I've been pushed around and bullied and I finally have a opportunity to turn it around.." I grab the outfit and look at prissy " it's not gonna hurt anyone " I sighed and went in the bathroom to change I came out with the black half shirt that said "twerk it" and white short shorts. I still had my glasses and high knee socks on with dirty converse. Prissy looked at me and took my glasses. " these aren't cute " she threw the glasses into the garbage. " NOO those are my babies!!! " I screamed. Prissy and her crew looked at me like I was crazy. " you can live without out them. Now come on we gotta work on your shoes " Prissy grabbed my arm and pulled it. I looked at her and thought to myself. " I gotta do it I'm tired of being bullied and being a nerd ". On the way to the shoe store I saw my best friend, Chrissy. She looked at me.. Then Prissy... Then me again, but this time she was disappointed. " this is my life not yours " I looked at Chrissy. we finally arrived. " get out we're here " prissy looked at me. I looked at her then at the big. Building that said " shoealicious! ". It looked mighty expensive. "Umm prissy do you have money for this stuff cause if you don't we can just leave " I suggested strongly. " no silly, I'm rich I can buy this whole entire store and everything inside of it now lets go " Wow no wonder every girl wants to be her I walk into the store and the new shoe smell attacked my face. Prissy looked at me " what size are you? " she asked " 7 in women " I answered. She grabbed a black and white hidden wedge sneaker like show and gave it to me " I'm sorry I don't do good in heels " I told her as she looked at me like I wasn't a real girl. " we'll you gotta try now put them on now " prissy demanded I grabbed the shoes and put them on " they fit " I told her. " get up " she ordered " why I sai- " she interrupted me " GET UP " she said then looked around and fixed her hair. I looked at her with fear and stood up. " Start to walk " she instructed. " okay I can do this Sophie you can do this " I thought to my self I started walking but looked like a 1 year old learning how to walk Prissy looked at me. She was really mad. " WHAT WAS THAT?!..."
"I'm really sorry prissy I've never done this before its my first time and..." Prissy looked at me.she was full of disgust. " I have never saw anything like that Sophie, THAT WAS THE WORST!!" Prissy yelled. She was really mad you could see a vain pop out from her neck. "I'm really sorry prissy" I apologized "Just shut up.I'm gonna buy them and your gonna go home and work on your walking.understood?". Prissy rolled her eyes and went to the cashier. I looked at her and sat on the bench. " I need to make her happy and work on everything. This is really hard but after all it will change my background" I thought to myself. I sighed and followed prissy. After 15 minutes of driving we finally arrived at my house. Then I realized... I still have that outfit on." Oh my god my mom is gonna be pissed. I need to change fast. " umm prissy do you think I can change in here before I go in my house. I don't want to get yelled at " I asked " Uhh no you got to tell your mom that this is the new you and she needs to get over it " prissy said as she flipped her hair. " ARE YOU CRAZY?!?! Disrespecting your mom is a huge no no. I can't do that!!! " I shouted quietly. I looked at her crazy and she looked at me back. " you will do it and I will watch you now come on and get out ". Prissy pushes me out the car. I walked to the house shaking like never before. " should I do it??? Am I gonna do it " I whispered to myself. My mom opened the door and looked at me worried. " mom!! " I screamed. She looked at me like I was a bad ass. I looked at prissy, she had a devious smile and mouthed to me... " do it " I looked at my mom a gulped really big. " Mom I... "
" I'm really sorry prissy I've never done this before this is my first time " Prissy was full of disgust. " you my nerd, are the WORST I've ever seen in humanity " " I'm sorry prissy! " I apologized " shut up! I'm gonna buy these wedges and your gonna practice your walking at home. Understood!? " prissy shouted, rolled her eyes and walked away. I sighed " I have to do this right! After all this will change my background I can finally be popular " I followed prissy to the cashier then left. After 15 minutes of driving, we finally arrived at my house Then I remembered.. I STILL HAVE ON MY OUTFIT! If I go in there like this my mom will be pissed and disappointed in me " Umm prissy can I uhh change in here before I go inside? " Prissy looked at me " Uhh no you need to tell your mom this is the new you and to get over it " I looked at her crazily " ARE YOU SERIOUS disrespecting my mom is a huge no no! " " you will do this and I will watch you now goo! " prissy pushed me out the car. I walked to the door shaking and before I got to it my mom opened the door. " Mom!! " I screamed . She looked at me worried. Her jaw dropped on my outfit she looked at me like a bad ass. I turned to prissy. She had a devious smile on her face and mouthed to me " do it " I looked back at my mom. " Mom I... "
" Mom I uhh... I.." I looked at prissy and thought to myself " popularity.. Popularity " " Mom this is the new me I don't want to be a nerd anymore " I looked at my mom then slid beside her to go to my room. My mom glared at prissy then slammed the door. " Sophie Ann Jones come down here right now " I stayed in my room So she came to me " what has gotten into you? " she asked me. " nothing mom nothing " I responded. I was expecting this " why are you wearing this... This mess " " Mom if you want to know so badly I'm tired of being bullied and being called a nerd.. I DONT WANT BE NERD! " I yelled " And you think this is the answer " " yes I do changing my look they might not call me a nerd " " your not a nerd your just really smart " " your not helping mom. Just leave now " " young lady, do not talk to me like that and you don't need to change to be cool " " your not the one being called a nerd and being looked down on " I rolled my eyes " Sophie that's enough change out if that now and I better not see you in anything like that again " I thought to myself " maybe she's right..." " NO YOUR NOT THE ONE BEING PUSHED AROUND ARE YOU NO. YOUR NOT THE ONE BEING BULLIED BECAUSE YOUR A SUPER GEEK. I DONT WANT TO LIVE THAT LIFE NO MORE. YOU PROBABLY WON'T UNDERSTAND NOW LEAVE MY ROOM NOW!!! " I pushed her out the room, locked the door and cried myself to sleep Ps sorry its short I gotta go somewhere
There's a few grammatical errors that toy should look out for. And maybe (if you know how to) use the italics bb code instead of quotation marks for the thoughts. It makes it a bit easier, in my opinion, to understand. But it's pretty good so far. Wall me when updated please