8 years ago two people fell in love in Middle school never had fought in a fight or anything ! perfect couple right? things change in the Future Ally and Brady have fights get a divorce and everything In July a new series is coming this was a hint hope u a enjoyed the pilot Note:No mean comments
"Mmm mmm yeah yeah mmm yeah yeah mmm mmm yeah yeah all day I could say was " Ally What is the quotient of this equation" I absolutely knew Mrs Canebacker was out to get me she knew what I was thinking about ! "So Ally what's the quotient u know what I am talking about Right ? " Mmmhmm I said Everyone just started staring at me and I knew it was total Silence! As I was quickly walking A sudden smirk came on a cute guys Face .He smiled and came walking toward me. I ran as fast as I. Could I was Highly Scared seven though I'm 12 Guys don't come and talk to me ! that's strange and unusual . I had only 2 friends Sadie and Pixie . As I ran out of the hallway and into Building D . I Got Really Afraid ! so I calmed down and he walked up to me and sounded Tired . "Ally why were you running away ! Because a boy Never comes up to me like that I'm very shy! " said Ally What is your name ? You Don't know my name ? I have been in your class 5 years and you don't know my name? "Oh yeah your Brady ! I wonder why I never ever noticed you! Will be updated soon Hope u enjoyed
I was always behind you in Science class , Maybe this will ring a bell Remember when your assignment blew up! "Yeah said Ally That was very embarrassing !!!!! Anyway I was wondering if you wanna Go out on a date Saturday night said Brady . " Of course I would Love too ! I will pick you up around 6:00 said Brady . Brady waked away happy with a smile on his Freckled face! Ooooooohhhh!!! Said Jeremiah Your going out with Ally! Yeah Said Brady I really like her and I know she likes me back!
Okay so I'm going to give you some tips... 1. Work on your punctuation there's no spaces in-between your words and your "? . , !" 2. When someone starts to talk you should start a new line. 3. Just make the storyline easier to follow and more suspenseful ? If you just follow those tips you'll story will improve
Home: I was very excited I really liked Brady ! , I don't need to get Too Attached . So as I put on the most cutest Little Dress I got ready for the best night ever!!!
Try brushing up on your grammar rules. There's a lot of mistakes, which can make reading difficult. Capitalization is all over the place too.
I continually walked out the room when Brady texted I can't make it!! I was maddddddd!!!!! Not was a total set up