dying...

Discussion in 'Off Topic' started by LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014.

  1. A bird of flames to my left
    A snake of hell to my right
    Once made to see the deft
    Once for the fight
    Death is after me
    Life is fighting time
    The scythe raised from he
    The ways of a rhyme
    Slashed unto a pile
    Become one with the dead
    What was once unto vile
    A place that none treads
     
    #1 LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014
  2. Damn the first two lines were actually quite good 
     
    #2 Nicewife, Jun 20, 2014
  3. I still think it's crap...
     
    #3 LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014
  4. Dude. Trust me. 
     
    #4 Nicewife, Jun 20, 2014
  5. Hell has snakes? 
     
    #5 Nicewife, Jun 20, 2014
  6. How much would you rate it....I give it a 0....
     
    #6 LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014
  7. In the books and shows I looked at...hell is a place of punishment so yeah
     
    #7 LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014
  8. wow... u wasting time here
    go write books or something u ll earn in real :-X
     
    #8 THRASHH, Jun 20, 2014
  9. I doubt it...
     
    #9 LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014
  10. I highly doubt I could make money with what I write....
     
    #10 LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014
  11. or u copying from.somewhere? -_- lol
     
    #11 THRASHH, Jun 20, 2014
  12. If you think it sucks… why post it? 
     
    #12 Nicewife, Jun 20, 2014
  13. No...as far as I know it's my own...but I doubt it will ever get published or even accepted
     
    #13 LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014
  14. Because, its a way to vent...writing crappy poems online
     
    #14 LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014
  15. i dont think its crappy…i cant even make things rhymn so :p
     
    #15 Tentacle, Jun 20, 2014
  16. I guess I should send them...if they do get published then thanks..if not...trash...
     
    #16 LelouchViBritannia-rebellion, Jun 20, 2014
  17. Bad dog :|
     
    #17 -Until_TheAshesOfEden_Fall-, Jun 20, 2014
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