Duncan's POV (Damn. Why does Courtney have to be the worst bitch in the world! ) Duncan thought to himself. He was almost 17 yrs old and had been through some very bad drama. His girlfriend Courtney (now ex-girlfriend ) had just broken up with him for no good reason ( well, except that hr had kissed another girl ,but I was practically forced to kiss Gwen!!) So now I just one lonely single man. Until I saw her. Hi thx for reading, post opinions here so I can make it better ,or just to add new characters
You keep changing from Third to first person narrator... Don't do that. Also you should check your grammar and spelling... And the story sounds pretty cliche but whatever floats your boat.