The Lonely Girl

Discussion in 'Off Topic' started by IvyIves, May 27, 2014.

  1. So, I've been writing a story and I've come upon a bit of writer's block. So to try and get my creativity flowing I wrote a few short poems. And I liked one in particular and decided to share it. I hope you like it. :)

    The Lonely Girl



    She walks the streets
    In this empty city.
    She passes children
    And their families.
    They laugh and smile,
    But she cannot.
    She bows her head
    And keeps walking.
    If she stops
    She'll always be
    The lonely girl.
    She walks for minutes,
    For hours, days, months.
    A year passes.
    And she is still lonely.
    One day, she stops walking.
    And she looks around.
    The children are different.
    They've grown,
    And so has she.
    She takes another step.
    A step forward.
    And sees a boy,
    With green eyes.
    He sees her,
    The lonely girl
    The girl with blue eyes.
    And he smiles.
    At her.
    She smiles back.
    He walks over to her,
    And they start walking.
    Together.



    ~ Ivy :geek:
     
  2. 2 spooky 4 me 10/10
     
  3. I really do like this a lot. When did you write this?
     
  4. I'm on Android so I can't see emojis in Forums. :(

    And thank you. I wrote it yesterday. :)
     
  5. It's nice the start reminded me of boulevard of broken dreams by green day lol.
     
  6. Lol that's ironic because I've had that song stuck in my head for like a week.
     
  7. 
     
  8. Very nice, I like the writing style very different, it's nice.
     
  9. It's cool. By the way, join Hackers in Fan Fiction :)
     
  10. It was interesting :) I'm a literate freak so I automatically compare any poet to my fave Johhn Keats or really any poet like Shelley so its unfair I have to withhold my judgement haha It was pretty good though, from a novice author I liked it xx
     
  11. I like this. Good job 
     
  12. Better than I was expecting.
     
  13. Thanks a bunches everyone. And I'll check it out Luke. ^^
     
  14. :D I love it, please do write more!!!