I was referring to childhood nostalgia. And he even credited that it was stolen. Gotta love spits humor
Stars reach across the sky with unspoken secrets, rainbows talk of the undying lie they promised. Everything decays and wears out, nothing was "alive" to begin with. The word "alive" was created to separate people from being "nothing". To be "alive" means walking, some people are not really walking because those who are walking break their legs so they can't walk. Explosions are from the wars of fallen angels and angels. Natural disasters are all out war of angels while "god" sits back in his throne. If "god" were really alive he would have shown himself to each generation, but "god" is just a fake.
This isn't really poetry.. No imagery, rhyme, flow, breaks, and as Ari had said earlier, no metaphors/similes. You got no breaks, no sensory details, quatrains/couplets. You are just writing shit and calling it poetry.
You know, your just a pompous ass who thinks he can barge in and say whatever, how do you know if it's a form of poetry or not, huh, how do you know? Big pompous ass...
You're*. Because like most of us here who passed all English classes in highschool, we were taught poetry. I've listed most of the things you've failed to include in this "poem". I'm not barging in saying whatever I want, in fact, I'm saying the truth. The truth that other people don't want to hurt you with, you need to know that truth.
There are many forms of poems, asses like you don't even know about, so shut up and research short story poems
Omg you're so damn blind to the poetry world. Poems and short stories cannot happen! Poems are like a condensed meaning of something, it depicts a theme or a message, a short story is.. Well it should be clear, there's characters, plots, and shit. That "short story poetry" had no character, no plot, nothing!
Again, you're* scrub. Plot: the plan, scheme, or main story of a literary or dramatic work, as a play, novel, or short story. Hmmmmmm, I think we'll have to wait till people more knowledgeable about poetry wakes up so you can learn some shit, preferably foxaii.
u seem to be trying too hard. let words flow. and rework them to suit the feel ur going for. atm it seems ur trying to be unique but falling into cliche. write from ur heart. learn what u feel through autowriting