Honestly, I agree with Angel, but the plot could go anywhere! I'd be really happy of you'd write more, and maybe more stories in the future.
Short update: She doesn't say anything back, her eyes just dart around the room trying to see what she hadn't seen before. Soon she spots it. In the corner of the room a swiveling camera, viewing and taking in everything in the room, including well...her. She stares at it as a broad smile overcomes her face. Inside though her mind is a torrent of thought and emotions. She's trained herself impeccably to not allow her face to show signs of anything besides happiness and mirth. Of course it's a survival tactic. Suddenly a slot opens up in the door and a sandwich is shoved through, turkey and cheddar shoved between two pieces of wheat bread. She slowly gets up not realizing just how hungry she was before seeing the sandwich, hopefully this could help give her some fuel for whatever is in store for her. She slowly walks to the sandwich when -Her head shrieks in pain as he hits her again, his frame towering over her prone body as she lays helpless fighting back tears. "You going to tease me and fight me some more bitch? Or are you finally going to fucking let me do what I've been wanting to all along? Either way I'm still going to have it." He yells at her as she struggles to get off the ground. He hits her again, her head bouncing off his hand and hitting the pavement with a sick smacking sound as all goes black as she hears the sound of a zipper opening.- • The camera silently observing her the whole time, the man behind the voice slowly smiles. Watching her. She's completely frozen as her mind takes her back her face betraying nothing but her eyes, her wonderful eyes are flashing through emotional quicksand. "Now this is what I wanted." He says as he stares intently at the screen. Of course he knew this would happen, he's been observing her for days as her flashbacks have gotten more and more frequent, finally ending in her move to take her own life, but he wants to give her life. Make her something. "And of course the eyes are the windows to the soul" he whispers quietly to himself.
Honestly, I do like the idea of someone who puts up a front, it's very refreshing to not have an open book now and again. However, I would recommend you perhaps try to make it flow a little better, connect ideas a tad bit more. Also, it's not a movie, so characters don't necessarily have to talk to themselves to get ideas across. Also, maybe a little bit more description of feelings, or maybe it's just the word choice, just to make it a tad bit more...coherent, I suppose, and a little bit of character. But otherwise I do like this very much.
Cherry I like it. The short update was a tad confusing. But I know my stories get like that. And to that yolo guy... Shut yer face. You just stick to your picture books. •^•
Lmaooo uuumm ......well it's good to know this isn't grammar school!! Haven't read it yet, lol....I like to see what ppl think first!! Which I seen its good so I'm off to read it now!! Haha