I dunno about you guys, but I found it way too rushed and confusing. She's on the plane for one second and then she's jumping off the plane? Also, didn't find any detail at all. The main character is just doing something. There are hardly any use of adjectives or describing what she looks like or even what she's doing. For example, you never explained the death of Courtney, you just said: "Courtney died". Punctuation is also an issue, but other people have already said that. I'm completely confused on what's even going on. In the second update, she's blacking out from a plane crash, which foreshadows an event happening in the bear future. In the next update, she's in school twelve years later? So what happened to her in those twelve years? For your first time, this story is not bad, but still needs improvement. Of course, as you continue, your writing will grow and definitely improve .