She sadly shook her head at her little sister,whose long brown curls fell down softly in ringlets.The airport was bustling with people today,and her plane was boarding. "Why can't I come with you,Courtney?" Her petite 6 year old voice says sadly "Because you aren't going to like where I'll be working,Al." "But I love London! I can see mum again!" "No,Al."She firmly says,gets up and kisses her little sister's cheek. She nods at her aunt. "Take care of her." The aunt meekly nods. She crouched down one last time,holding her sister's face in her hands. "I love you,Alexandra Watson." She stood up,stole one last glance and walked towards the gate,tears streaming from her bright blue eyes. She never knew that she would never come back to this country. Never to step foot again,never to feel any land. She never knew that Those were her last dying words.
Not a bad start! Remember to put punctuation after everything, and every punctuation mark (including commas) should have a space after it (unless a quotation mark comes right after it).
Courtney I passed my passport and plane ticket to tthe lady who had seen everything.She passed me a sad smile,the smile that described a million words.She had known what I felt at one point in her life. I smiled at her and passed through the table. I went into that noisy tunnel towards the plane and tried to stop the lump in my throat. I had this urge to run back towards the airport and never leave.But I couldn't. I walked onto the plane,sat down on my seat and stared out the window. In that airport my family was there.Or my replacement family,I guess. I plug in my beats and fall into a slumber. -4 HOURS LATER- I couldn't see anything but I heard and felt the panic in the air. All of a sudden, the captain was yelling for life jackets since we were above the sea. I opened my eyes and saw everyone panicking. The plane was crashing and people lined up to jump. My eyes widen,and I can feel adrenaline wash over my body,along with fear and confusion. I put on my lifejacket and lined up.I was almost going to jump when I heard a boy cry out "Help!I'm stuck!" I quickly ran over to him,and took off the strap that was stuck to his leg. We couldn't fit on one life jacket so I gave it to him and told him to jump. I rummaged around the plane to see if there were any life jackets left. The plane was quickly crashing. I gave a silent prayer to God,for everything he has done for me and my family. I breath one last time,before I blacked out.
The punctuation thing. I'm sorry but it's a bit bothersome. Otherwise, it's not bad, maybe a little rushed. There's no real reason to care about this person other than the fact that there is a little girl who has some sort of relationship with her. But even that is pretty brief. Which is okay I guess as long as you go into more detail, it's just a preference of mine to be invested in the character before something terrible happens to them.
Sorry, I realized she was her aunt like two seconds after I posted it my bad. Also the but of foreshadowing at the end. This must be extremely short then?
--12 YEARS LATER-- ~~~LEXI~~~ I groaned in dismay at the results of the exam. Honestly,I haven't had enough time to study with all the projects and homework they give and they expect me to pass a geometry based exam?! Damn. Anyways,I flicked a long brown stand behind me shoulder and put my head on the desk. "ALEXANDRA WATSON!"a voice yelled. I shook awake and looked up. "Detention.3pm."a stern voice said. Oh,THAT voice. Mrs.Peterson. I rolled my eyes and looked up. "Okay, sure,fine,whatever."I mumbled. She walked away,the clicking of her heels to be heard around the aisle. "As I was saying,the blah blah blah blah nlah of blah blah blah is blah blah blah" I rolled my eyes again and thought of something else. My evil aunt and family. Ugh. They used to be so sweet and caring. Until my aunt had a kid. And then another. My aunt used to love me so much until... Courtney died. She blamed me for everything. It wasn't even my fault! They say there's a reason for everything. But what's the reason for this?
Please don't enter twice after every single sentence, like in the second half. It gets really annoying.