I was only two when I learned about cancer. It toke my mothers life. I just woke up from my nap when mom came sobbing through the doors. I asked her what was wrong. Her response was unexpected that she had a week to live and cancer and taken over. I cried until she died, until the funeral, until I became stronger.
If you're gonna finish that, make sure you check your spelling and grammar Other than that, not too bad!
. .So I guess it's sad but to be honest I didn't feel that much. I mean I did, but I didn't. Ugh, I can't make sense today. xD . .Maybe if you made it more extended and gave it a bit more detail. What happened was sad, and the way you worded it I thought was good but I feel if you wrote a little more about the characters the reader would feel more close to them and more personally involved with the story, and so they would be more affected by it. I'm not sure if you're continuing or not, but assuming it's a short story it is pretty effective, I just think you could go on a little more. . . I don't know, just my view. It's good as it is though.
I doubt a mother would tell her two year old child that she was going to die, just like that. Plus, would a two year old even understand the concept of death, or even what cancer is?
You'd be surprised how much a two year old knows Tash My 27 month old niece lives with us and she pretty much understands everything we say. A lot of us don't really understand how much those babies know until you see it for yourself. Maybe they don't know exactly what death is but to be told that your mother will only be with you for one more week, there's no doubt that they understand what that means? I work in a daycare for infants - 4 year olds and they understand a lot of what you're saying but don't really say anything about it However, this... paragraph (?) was rather sad and I kind of hope you write more. Just work on spelling/grammar and you should be fine
Honestly to me, it wasn't really sad at all, I mean I get that the concept was supposed to be sad but it wasn't sad to me. I think it needs more details to rise more emotions from your readers.