"Scar! Scarlet Mae Cooper! I said get up!" She yells as she storms in my room and slaps me across my sleeping face. Hard. "And don't make me come back in here with a belt!" The door slams shut behind her Great now school with a big red mark on left cheek. I groan and lazily slide outta bed after I look at my alam clock. 7:00 a.m Chase will be here in 30 minutes. I grab a pair of black jeans and my adventure time shirt the one my mom hates so bad, she claims it makes me look "childish" but really I think she's just mad because I like the shirts dad gets me better. I slip them on and quickly throw my brown hair into a ponytail. Good enough. I apply a bit of make up on after I brush my teeth and wash my face, maybe it'll help cover the red mark......it doesn't i'm still as pale as ever and my cheek is still bright red...and stings. "Thanks ma, a lot." I mutter before I pull my backpack on one shoulder, grab my keys, slip my old converses on I had since last year and head downstairs. "What did I tell you about that stupid shirt? Do you know how childish you look?" She says as I head for the door. Chase is already waiting in the driveway leaning against his "baby", 10 minutes early as usual. He claims it "helps with parking" but I think he just loves waking me up early. "Do you know how stupid you look?" Muttering quickly as I walk out the door. "Ready?" He says as he stands up straight. He's wearing a blue polo, faded jeans, and Nike's. "Yeah, let's go." I turn my head trying to avoid Chase from seeing my cheek but I'm too late, his thumb is already rubbing against my stinging cheek. I quickly move his hand, trying to avoid his worried eyes. "Again? S-she hi-" I cut him off before he can finish his sentence "Yea.......can we....can we just go? You're not gonna find any parking spaces." He stared at me for what felt like hours then finally nodded "Yea...you're right." He rubs his face then shuts my door after I get in. After that awkward 10 minute drive we finally arrived at no other than Krippleton High School. Groaning I get out and met Chase at the front of his car. Leaning against his hood we both stare at the school. Not saying a word to one another. Not many people are here yet except your usual group of nerds trying to convince the staff go let them in as they usually do on test days. I close my eyes and take a deep breath "you can do it Scar, no pressure." Just the thought of test make my blood pressure rise. "Come on Scar, time to go in." Coming back to reality I open my eyes and look at Chase's smiling face, Chase was never the one to get all worked up over test cause he always passed. I nod and we head towards the school. "Here goes nothing." ********************************** "Everyone eyes on their OWN paper, no talking, and no "coughing or sneezing" unless you have an actual cold which I high doubt since is about 80 degrees here. Now you may begin." Swallowing hard I look at Chase one last time to "try to clam oneself" but it didn't really work.....as usual. ********** About 30 minutes what sounds like Miss.Jonesy walks in, and suddenly everything goes silent and all I can hear is my own heartbeat. I look up and I see this tall, pale, and skinny guy. His hair is jet black, long to his jaw, and covering his eyes. His face structure is almost perfect. He turns his head slowly and finally I can tell he's looking at me. A gust of wind hits my face and I close my eyes and gasp, then suddenly the sound of my surroundings is back. "Thank you Mr.Colemen." Moss. Jonesy walks out and he's just standing there looking at me. "Well class it seems we have a new student. Class this is Reaven Michaelson please do your best to make him feel as welcome as possible. Have a seat behind Scarlet, the girl in front of the only empty seat. As for the rest of you back to your test!" I bite my bottom lip and look at Chase who is shrugging. I try my best not to stare at him as he passes by me but as he do I get this cold chill inside me. Something about him scares me but I just want to know more. "Focus Scar, you need this A." Whispering to myslef as I go back to my test. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I know it seems like it's going to be all romance but it's not. So tell me what you think and if I should continue. Thanks.
Not bad so far. I would suggest not using slang/informal words in the narration because it can make it seem sloppy. Also, maybe add some more description and replace some basic words with more descriptive ones. There are some spelling/grammar/punctuation errors too, so I would suggest proofreading to catch those. It's pretty interesting overall. Keep it up!?