Emily pulled into the school parking lot just as the bell rang. The halls flooded with strangers, she felt everyone's eyes on her and thought it best to keep her eyes on the floor. Bad idea. Just as Emily turned the corner, she bumped into someone, knocking all of their books to the floor. "Watch it!" Emily looked up and met a girls angered expression. "It was an accident, or did you not notice." The girl sneered, "Excuse me, but you might wanna learn who I am before you consider back talking me." Emily's could feel the heat in her cheeks. People were crowding around watching with interest of the possible fight that might break out. "I could care less who the hell you are." Just as they stepped up to eachother, the crows dispersed slightly for whoever was coming through. Of course, it was Jook.
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