I walked into school monday morning all nervous for my first day of school. I didn't know what to expect. I was so nervous my stomach felt like butterflies. Oh my! I forgot to inroduce myself. Excuse that. My name Ranae Miller. I am 14-years old. I just moved here, california all the the way from Maine. I walked to the front office and opened the doors of the office and walked to the front desk and asked, "Uhm excuse me Ma'am , I'm looking for Mrs. Parter. Where can I find her?" The lady I asked looked at me for a minute and then she pointed to my left. "It's right down the hallway. Have a good day." I said thank you to her and went on my way. I had heard that Mrs. Parter was nice but can be mean at times. Hopefully I don't get on her bad side. Good Luck to me!
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Update ================================= I walked into the hallway and there were photo frames, and a few chairs in the hallway. I approached Mrs. parter's room. I knocked on her door. No answer. I then walked in a found her passed out.
Slow down the action, add description, and try not to make it a typical boring high school drama story.