My name is Tatiana. I attend Hunter's High School with my two best friends: Peter and Carter. We've known each other for a long time now, and we're very close. I'm 16 now and very, extremely short. I'm 5'1". Honestly, it's depressing sometimes. And it doesn't help that Carter and Pete are so much taller than I am. As I got ready for the day, I curled my long, waist length hair. Thankfully, our school didn't have a strict dress code. I got a strip of left over cloth that I had from sewing a blouse and tied at the side of my head in a hippie-ish sort of way. Everyone called me a hippie anyway, so it suited me and my flower child ways. After I got dressed and grabbed my book bag, I walked out of the house, locking the door behind me. Alejandro was already there waiting for me. "Hey Sis," he told me. I grinned at him. I had known him longer than either Carter or Peter and Alejandro was like a brother to me. I wish he could actually be my brother however. "Hey Bro, how's it going?" I asked him. And with that we started the walk to school. Seeing as how we didn't have any classes together and we didn't talk to each other during our free classes, we had promised to walk to school together. "Same as always. And how're you?" he asked. I glanced at him. "Need you ask me that question?" Didn't you get my text message last night?" "Well..." he started off. "I was busy." I burst out laughing. "Oh really? I'm sure I can guess why you were busy." Alejandro's face grew red. He had a pale complexion and rich brown eyes. The opposite of me. My skin was a caramel color and my eyes were a light hazel hue. "Shut up!" he said, starting to laugh himself. I snickered. "Love you too." I said blowing him a kiss. I noticed Carter and Peter and quickly ran towards them. "Catch ya later Alejandro!" I called behind me. He just waved bye. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Alright so first time doing this >_< please leave some constructive criticism thank you
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As I walked over to Carter and Peter, I felt a sudden chill and shivered. I guess I forgot to mention the part about how I can communicate with the dead? I turned to where I felt the cold and saw a small child looking up to me. I sighed and felt a tear roll down my cheek. He was too young to have died. Carter ran up to me. She must've noticed my reaction to the ghost. "Tati? Tati, talk to me!" she grabbed my shoulders and shook me softly. I snapped my eyes away from the child. He would have to wait. I looked at Carter. "I'm sorry Carter." "Was it a ghost?" she asked me, worried. I was always open with my friends, well, with everyone really. I didn't believe that this should be kept a secret, so a lot of people knew. Yeah, I people said things about me, but I didn't care. I nodded my head. "He was so young. Maybe five..." I trailed off. Peter walked up to us. "Tatiana, are you alright?" Carter looked at him. "It was another ghost Peter." He placed a hand on my shoulder. "We're here for you." <> "I'm gonna kill you Tatiana Rodriguez! Kill you!" he screamed. "No! No! Noo..." I woke up in a cold sweat still screaming no. I sat up in bed. I heard footsteps in the hall and my heart raced faster. I grabbed my small alarm clock, ready to throw it at whoever walked in. The door opened slowly and...my mother peeked her head. "Tatiana, mi chiquita linda, que paso?" (Tatiana, my lovely girl, what happened?) she asked me. While my mom spoke English very well, she had a habit of slipping into Spanish sometimes. "Nothing mom," I told her, breathing a sigh of relief. She walked in and sat down at edge of my bed. "I know it was something. Was it another dream?" she asked me. My mother knew me well. From her I had inherited this curse. She, however, thought of it as a blessing. She pulled me in for a hug. "Shh, shh, don't tell me. It's alright now darling. Just try and go back to sleep." She stroked my hair for a little while before standing up. She walked to my dresser, took out a lighter from one of the drawers, and lit one of my scented candles. Immediately the scent of eucalyptus leaves filled the room. It soothed me instantly and I started to drift back to sleep. I barely noticed when my mom closed the door quietly. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ok soooo second update comments?
I dragged myself out of bed. I was dreading today. It was Saturday, and I wouldn't have anything to distract me from dealing with this ghost. I got ready and after taking a shower and drying my hair I walked back into my bedroom. I walked to my dresser and lit one of my many candles. Then I went back to my bed and sat down on the edge. I sighed before opening myself up for any spirits that might need me. Immediately, the boy appeared before me again. I bent down so we were eye level. "Hey there, what's your name?" I said trying not to cry. The children were always the hardest for me to deal with. "I'm Henry," he said pointing to himself. "And what's wrong Henry?" I asked him. He stared blankly at me before fading away. This always happened with the kids. If they were too young when they died, they wouldn't be able to tell me how I could help them, which was often difficult. I decided I needed to get out of the house so I called Carter to see if she was busy. She wasn't, so we decided to meet at the park. I was already sitting in a swing when I saw her. "Someone looks awfully gloomy today," she said. "Someone looks awfully out of there comfort zone today," I replied. She blushed slightly. Carter was a complete tomboy but today she was wearing a dress and what appeared to be wedge sandals. "Well, I can explain-" she started. I held up my hand to stop her. "Nope, don't tell me. Trying to impress a boy I presume?" I asked her. "Yes, but it's not just any boy..." she trailed off. And that's when I noticed she was almost trying to mimic my style of dressing. I sighed realizing who she wanted to impress. "Peter?" I asked. Peter had long ago confessed to me that he cared for me in more than just a friendly way, however I couldn't return that feeling. And unfortunately, Carter just had to have a crush on him. She nodded and looked down, embarrassed. "Well, guess you better go see him. You don't want that to go to waste." I shooed her away and she walked to the bus stop to catch a bus to Peter's house. <> I walked in the house. "Hey Tatiana," someone said as I walked in. It wasn't my mother, so I got scared. "Who is it?" I frantically looked around for a weapon of some sort but there wasn't one. "It's just me, calm down," Peter stepped out of my living room and into the front hall slightly laughing. I groaned. "What are you doing here?" I asked. "Why aren't you at home?" "Well, I got really worried after the episode yesterday so I thought I'd come see you. Your mom went out by the way so that's why I'm alone here." "You forgot about Carter again, didn't you?" I asked him. He cringed. "Shoot. I did. Aww geez..." "Listen Peter, you can't keep on doing this to her." "I know, it's just..." he took a step toward me. "I don't have feelings for her in that way." he took another step towards me. I looked up at him. He was so tall. I started to get apprehensive. He was so close to me. Was his face getting closer? No no that's not it. Right? Ok, so now his face is an inch from mine. What's happening? Why aren't I reacting? And then...he kissed me. And the worst part was, I liked it. I pushed him away from me. "Peter, I think you should go," I said staring hard at the floor. "But Tatiana-" he started to say. "No buts. Get home and apologize to Carter." I felt so guilty I could feel tears rushing to my eyes. Friends don't do this to friends. "That was a mistake Peter. A mistake." "It wasn't a mistake, it was perfect." I raised my head and glared at him, tears falling down my face. "Yes it was! Now go, go! I betrayed Carter. Go!" I looked away and started walking up to my bedroom. I heard the door slam shut behind him. I got to my bedroom and closed the door. I leaned against it before sliding down onto the floor. I put my head in my hands and cried. What was wrong with me? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Yeah was it too long? >_> sorry so please tell me what you think so far
I checked my phone. Thirty more minutes till I had to be at school. I cringed. Not only would I have to see Peter, I would also have to see Carter. I was already dressed and ready to go, but I wanted to give the spirit some time to have me help him. After fifteen minutes, the spirit didn't show up, so I left the house. I caught up with Alejandro. "Al!" I called out to him. He spun around. "I was wondering why you didn't wait for me today. What's up girl?" he asked me. I laughed. "Oh, just dreading today," I sighed. He raised an eyebrow. "Because..?" "I'm gonna have to see Peter. And Carter." "Ooh," he said. "Spill the frejoles, what happened now?" Alejandro was such a gossip. "Well...Peter kissed me," I stared down at the floor, slightly embarrassed. "Hmm really?" he asked. "Wait, are you blushing?" he started laughing. "No way. You like him? I thought you had a better taste in guys. I mean, we were together at one time, and not to brag, but I'm pretty desirable." I scowled at him. "I am not blushing!" however, I could feel my cheeks get even hotter. He laughed louder. "You are blushing and you know it! You liked when he kissed you, didn't you?" he said looking at me intently. "Ok, maybe I did. But that doesn't mean I like him..." "Tatiana, I know you. You like him. You just don't want to admit it." I looked away. We were nearing the school now. I could see Peter and Carter now. "Well, does he kiss better than I do?" Alejandro puckered his lips at me. I started laughing and threw my headband at him. "Shut up ya huge flirt!" He tossed the headband back at me. "Well, since I'm such of a good friend, I'll walk you into school so you can evade them until lunch." "Thanks dude," I said smiling. <> It seemed like the first half of the day came in a whirl wind and before I knew it, it was lunch time. I trudged into the cafeteria and looked around for Carter and Peter. I found them sitting at our usual table. "Hey you guys," I said trying to smile. "Cute dress Tati," Carter told me. I smiled. "Thanks. So, what's up?" "Well," Peter started, "wanna explain Carter?" "Sure. Tatiana, Peter and I are dating now," Carter said smiling. She looked so happy. But I wasn't so sure about how I looked. "Are you ok?" Carter asked me. "You look like you just saw a ghost, sweetie." "I'm fine. Fine." I stood up and walked out of the cafeteria. I started running and bumped into Alejandro on his way to the cafeteria. "Hey, Tatiana, what's wrong?" he asked me. He grabbed my shoulders so I couldn't leave. I just sank into him. "Peter asked Carter to be his girlfriend." Alejandro's arms went around me and he patted my back. "It's not the end of the world." I looked up at him. I knew I was crying. "But he doesn't even like her Alejandro. Why would he..?" "Listen, guys do stupid stuff sometimes. He'll come around sooner or later." "I'm leaving. I can't stay here for the rest of the day. I feel sick." I gently pushed him away from me. "Well I'm not letting you go by yourself. Who knows what you're gonna do. Come on, I'll ditch with you," he said. "Really?" I asked, hopeful. "Of course. Now what are we waiting for?" Alejandro and I walked out of the front doors and started for my house. In some way, I felt that Alejandro and I had gotten closer. Closer than we ever were as a couple. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Miss Angela should be back today so I thought it'd be nice to update today for her comments? Suggestions?