Forever

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by RosyBlue, Aug 21, 2013.

  1. {Flashback}

    "Hey Kat you want a ride ? I hate to see you walking in the snow " said Andrew

    I agreed and got into his truck.
    *the ride was filled with silence*
    Once we got there he dropped me off but before he did he asked me if I could go with him to the coffee place on Main St . Of course I said yes he has been my friend since 1st grd


    Pls post comments and tell me how to make it better this is my first story
     
  2. Like I said in the messages. Also, check spelling.
     
  3. Yup I wil work on it
     
  4. Please don't use asterisks.? Any actions can be described with words. Also, add punctuation and description. I can't see where this is going yet, but I'll be reading.
     
  5. I'm redoing this onece I get time
     
  6. Maybe tomorrow or next wek I will rewrite thus
     
  7. Okay. If you want, maybe I could be your editor for spelling/grammar mistakes.
     
  8. Okay, then pm me updates whenever you want.