cx I agree with poppet, i didnt catch it myself when I was helping you >.< sorry about that, but its a good start ^-^
***Chapter 2*** As Danny stumbled out of Claire's house his confusion turned to anger as he slammed the door shut. Danny walked the streets almost in tears "Can this day get any worse" At that moment three people approached Danny "hey? Are you Danny?" The tallest of the trio said. Danny nodded confused "yeah? Who's asking?" The trio smirked then the smaller two grab Danny's arms and the tallest smiled. "Don't disrespect my friend Claire's house" The tallest man spat fiercely When Danny heard her name his face dropped and spoke weakly "She sent you?" The two holding Danny giggled, then Danny felt a brutal amount of force to his stomach. He collapsed breathless and in tears as he try's to get up, but the trio pounced on him and beat him brutally, all that is heard is Danny's screams of pain then silence as Danny blacks out.
A faint voice echoed in Danny's mind, he was unsure of where it was coming from. His eyes flinched as the sunlight shown bright in his eyes and the voice became more realistic. As Danny opened his eyes he saw a young girl smiling as her light brown hair shimmered in the light "Hey I'm April what was that all about I found you being beaten by three jerks but I scared them off" she giggled as she spoke sweetly. "Oh..... I'm Danny........lets just say I'm having a bad day" he said faintly while trying to smile and look strong. "I have had bad days but your bad days make mine look like a walk in the park" April giggled as she played with her short light brown hair.
You need punctuation after dialogue. If you have "___ said" after it, then make it a comma. You're still getting better, though.