Prologue "something like this Rose?" He asked his new found friend "yeah great Danny but there are too many rooms where gonna have to rent some out" Danny simply nodded and replied "yeah but how we gonna get people to rent one of our room" Rose cheekily smiled "leave it all to me I won't rest till we have this sorted" ***Chapter 1*** Danny woke up and smiled happily "morning babe" he said as he went to cuddle his girlfriend who he had fallen asleep next to but was no longer there when he woke up "DANNY!!!" Her voice echoed in a tone he had never heard before a tone that sent a shiver down his spine. He got out of bed and walked to Claire she stood watching Danny in a way that made him feel uneasy "Danny I need to tell you something" Danny unease felt much worse he stuttered "w...w...what d...do. You need to tell me" he felt weak "I'm sorry but this isn't working for me I love someone else" Danny turn pale as Claire watches and smirked. She kept smirking "oh just so you know you can't stay here Danny this is my house now get out" Claire said with a smiles as if she took pleasure in doing it Danny could barely stand he stuttered "b..but where will I go?" Claire chuckled to her self "not my problem NOW GET OUT!"
But like the prologue doesn't make sense. A prologue is supposed to be an introduction giving information about the person. You can't introduce two different characters and expect the reader to know what you're thinking. You need detail. A lot of it. You also need to proofread; I saw a lot of grammatical issues and organization. Separate the dialogue. Dialogue acts as its own paragraph.
Plz keep reading updates tho because the prologue is based in future and it's the start of a key plot line
Make sure the reader knows it's from the future. In Ch 1 you should've put "Five years ago" or something like that
I agree with poppet. :3 For dialogue, make a new paragraph each time a new person starts speaking. The first letter of dialogue should be capitalized if it's the start of a sentence, and there should always be punctuation after dialogue, even if it's just a comma and then a "s/he said". You switched tenses in the writing. That's a common mistake, but it tends to be confusing… also there were a few grammar mistakes, like "a smiles". I recommend proofreading to try to catch those errors.