First story: She stormed to her room in tears, leaving her mother and the policeman down. She sprang through her bedroom door slamming it behind her and then dived head first onto her bed, first her best mate then 4 close friends now her father had there lives taken by a mad gun man. She suddenly jolted awake from this torturous night mare, crying again it was the 26th August 2013. 8 years since the killing of her dad and things hadn't improved at all...
I suggest adding more detail and emotion and lengthening the updates. The plot seems promising, though.