First Story Ever Made :O you guys tell me if you enjoy it and then i shall continue Reviews, tips, anything, Im Open! ------------------------------------- Nikolai was the normal, dull boy, with dirty blonde hair, normal brown eyes, he wasnt really that muscular. He lived yet a simple life, boring but a happy one, yet by one simple turn of events everything was going to go straight to hell. It was on his birthday that it happened...Happiest day of the year for him, like most people. Sadly, this will no longer be that day, it will turn to his most horrible day yet... His mom was cutting the cake after singing for him with his father and sister. Nikolai smiled as he kissed his mom's cheek after giving him a piece. "Thanks mom, dad and Gabriella, for making this an awesome day!" Nikolai exclaimed, smiling. It was then that it happened... It first sounded like a huge tornado was thrashing and jumping around like a pissed bull inside the house, next what was seen was unbelievable a huge floating, obsidian hole was sucking everything up and out of it came what Nikolai thought only existed in nightmares. It's face was that of a goat, but with fiery eyes, burning with hatred, his body was huge and furry, with as coat as black as night itself, in his disgusting hand, drenched with blood he held a huge menacing cleaver which at the end of it, was his father's lifeless body. ----------------------------------------- Getting interesting? Hope so :3
Hey Ben! Yeah, I think your story is going great! Just add more details, qnd try to make a good twist so it can give the reader more attention. Overall, good job!