~Journey to Woghorts~

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Hot_Tom, Aug 5, 2013.

  1. So this is gonna be such a lame story but here goes. It's my first so please don't be too mean.

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    My name is Harry, and I recently got sent away from my family, and had to come to this mysterious school. I did not know anyone, and I had to catch a train everyday to get there. I had two best friends, Luke-A ginger boy who could be very stupid, and Eve-A smart girl who was quite pretty. I always think Luke has got a thing for Eve.
    When I arrived at Woghorts it was all strange, the massive dining hall had no roof. We all lined up and the sorting shoe picked which house we were in. Me, Luke and Eve were all in the same house; Gryffinpaw. When we starting tucking into this amazing feast, professor CrumbleCore had prepared for us, I met Luke's sister, Elenna. She said hello to me. I managed to say hello back and smiled. She had long browny-blonde hair, blue eyes and a beautiful smile. Although she was a whole year above me, I thought I had a thing for her...
     
  2. So what do you think of my first ever story?? 
     
  3. Your joking right...this is basically an awful spin-off of Harry Potter. Just stop.
     
  4. Aha I did apologise for it being bad
     
  5. I loved this!!!! Best story on here I commend you!!!
     
  6.  Dont be mean! No one is prefect on their first time.  You'll learn from your mistakes. Just think of this as a learning experience. 
     
  7. Aha thanks  I'm feel so proud 
     
  8. I* feel so proud
     
  9. Look forward to the update ;)
     
  10. I get that it's his first story, but I refuse to congratulate him on something that wasn't very good.
     
  11. Hey, the updates are going to be better, I just needed a starting point and a catchy title, and also the main character is not the same as the one with the  on his head or who lives in a cupboard 
     
  12. Update in a few mins
     
  13. man I had to re-read it again, it was awesome
     
  14. After we had finished this banquet, we all went into our common rooms where the years above us put on a show for all us young little people. Soon Elenna was singing. I was just thinking what it would be like if we could get married. No that would be weird. Marrying Luke's sister?!? He'd never forgive me.
    Soon we went off to out dorms. I had to share a room with this boy called Alex, he was athletic, and already went out with someone here despite only knowing them for 6 hours. Soon Elenna came in. I pretended to be asleep. She walked over to Alex and gave him a hug, then left. How dare he??? Alex stole my future wife. I felt like jumping out a window.
    I woke up. Was it all just a dream? I think it was. It was sports today. We had to run around on vacuum cleaners with a tennis racket and hit each other. I don't understand vacuums. I must of got sucked into it 4 or 5 times. Then I saw Elenna, again. She was with this other boy. Holding hands. I fell off my vacuum, and got sucked up again.
     
  15. I think JK Rowling should sue you for copyright infringement.
     
  16.  I know right Hawk
     
  17. I'm sure it took a lot of effort for J.K. Rowling to write seven books worth of this, and for you to practically copy it is extremely selfish.
     
  18. No, he more fucked it up if anything. Lol This is just failure.