Chapter 2: SpitFire and his homie Kelon went on an adventure to eradicate the evil villains called A-51!!!!!! A group WHO threaten TO decimate the HUMAN RACE!!!!!!! So both strapped on their gear, looked up to the sky and cried some tears, for they might not come back! THESE A-51 peeps was like super dangerous, and only those who had balls or lacked intelligence would dare CHALLENGE THEM In a EPIC battle of ROCK paper Scissors!!!! Chapter 3 coming out whenever
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