Hey, It's Kay again. I'm gonna try and write a story a good one. And I would like you have you guy comment and tell me what I can improve on. I love positive feedback. And yes I already know I will probably make grammar errors ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Chapter | Why do I feel so weird? Like I'm not even me... I can't see, I can't speak, and I'm starting to feel like I can't breathe. Then I start a flash of light in my eyes. And that's when I realize.. I'm in a laboratory! The scientists stare down at me. "The Subject is responding quicker than expected." One of them said as they read something over the screen. I lift my head a bit and sees that I'm in a sheer plastic like gown. A man entered the run in a black suit and tie. "Is the subject ready for testing?" He asks as the scientist injects something into my arm. And again in my other arm. "Almost Sir." Why do they keep calling me subject? I'm a human being just like the rest of them! Why am I here? What are they doing? A thousand unanswered questions lingered in my mind. Suddenly I feel extremely sleepy. I try to fight myself in keeping my eyes open. But that didn't last long. I was out. Fast asleep. When I wake up I notice I'm not in a laboratory anymore. I was I'm the comfort of a bed. The only thing is.. It wasn't my bed. Nor was it my room. I sit up quickly then notices I'm naked. I quickly grabs a pillow to cover myself as I look around the room. I stare at the door knob as it slowly opens. An older man walked in. Her looked about a few years older then me. Like Twenty or nineteen years old. He shut the door slowly, turning towards me with a wicked gleam in his teal eyes. "Morning Alessandra." One question entered my mind... How does he know my name...
its really how does he know ur name? Not did he rape me? Who is he? Why am i naked some where else? do cows moo in there own language?
kay be careful about p.o.v's kay and also tenses Also check over and re read what you write, I caught some weird words in there that maybe were misspelled and then auto corrected to another word. But other then that good though, haha same name huh?
Your tenses >.< ahaha yeah I agree with mist she's naked in a strange room and she wants to know how he knows her NAME? Haha yeah but I can't wait for more. She should turn out to be a dark and twisted creeper who likes to kill people…
Haha. I wrote this a while back and you guys are bringing it to life now. And I know. My characters are strange.
Lol Angel's comment reminds me of Elfen Lied. Which is also what reminded me of that situation. As well as Resident Evil o3o