This is my first post here, so I have no clue how this will turn out? ______________________________ I used to be a happy little girl, I remember. When I was little, me and my mom used to get along. I remember when I was 7 or 8, my mom would tell me that if in the future she ever started constantly nagging, and trying to rip my throat out for the simplest of things to tell her and she would try and not behave like that. Well, she definitely has become that monster now. A few years ago, I told her how the only thing she ever says about me is how horrible I am, and that she always yell at me for anything and absolutely nothing. As you can guess, she definitely did not take that as promised. Instead she got extremely pissed and throughout the next few days forced me to write a list of all my flaws, all the bad things about me, and many of goals for how to "improve" myself. So long for what you made me promise when I was little mom, you have successfully become the monster that you used to tell me you never wanted to become. Congratulations. You used to tell me if you ever came close to behaving like that, that I should let you know, but mother that promise I made as a child is officially broken now. I will never again utter a word to you about what you have become. You do not care, and I refuse to face what would happen if I ever tried to carry the promise out.
Thanks guys, im not sure if Im going to continue this though cuz i have no idea what else to do with it
Idk if ill do another because im not sure what to put in, but if i do it, what would you guys want in it/happening?
This is an amazing start or finnish depending is you continue. It has a lot of openings to continue on through if you look in a different mind set. Maybe she grows up to be that monster as well but keeps a journal of it and her thoughts That's just something random~
It's really up to you, but if you need suggestions, you could try making the girl want to escape. Maybe her mom gets even more crazy and starts to kill people and the police think it's her so she's running from the law. Maybe she finds out some evil person is controlling her mom. Idk. :3
I like your guys ideas! And i think i know what i can do for the next few updates, ill try and write one by the end if the day.
It wasnt by the end if the day, but here it is! Hope you guys like it. ________________________________ I run to my room and slam the door. I'm tired of it all. All I ever hear from anybody in my family is scolding, how bad of a person I am and how I screw everything up. I'm fed up with it and almost every night I end up crying myself to sleep: Im sorry, im sorry that i was ever born and that I exist and ruin your lives. I know it would be better for everyone if I were to just disappear, but unfortunately thats not possible. I promise that eventually i'll disappear. None of you will ever have to face the shame and disgust of having me in your family. Soon I'll go somewhere far away. I wont be there to ruin your wonderful lives anymore, I'll let you continue living as if I was never there. Im sorry that I cant go now, and I know that you all hate me and want me gone, Im not deaf nor blind, I understand and I promise that as soon as I can, Ill completely disappear from all your lives. And this promise, I intend to keep. Truly, I cant wait. I open the top drawer of my desk and fish out the key that I have hidden between my index cards. I then kneel down and unlock the bottom drawer with the small, iron key. I open the drawer and begin to remove the files, papers, and all the other junk that I keep there to conceal my notebook. I take out the notebook, go to my desk and begin writing down my thoughts and plans. ___________________________________
I like it. ^.^ be careful not to start too many sentences in a row with 'I', because it gets a little repetitive.