So I've noticed that my stories haven't been doing so well and it is partially because I'm just not motivated to do a good job so my work probably comes across as sloppy 0.0 However, I am starting fresh and creating a new story. I would really like feedback. I don't want insults (like "you suck" or "go back to school"), but harsh criticism is welcome. I will be continuing "The Celebrity and Me" for those who read that My new story will have different POV's from time to time. Normally I dislike this kind of writing, but it seems to do alright with this story. Also updates will be labeled with the name of that characters POV (eg. Update 9: Jane means that the update is from Jane's point of view) Please enjoy. -Katie Shute ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Update 1: Jane Never in a million years would I have thought that I'd be sitting in an older man's apartment asking him for help. Of course, he wasn't just any random person. He was a bounty hunter whom I was able to find through some papers that belonged to my father. My father was once the head chief of the bounty hunter agency this man worked for but had retired last year. "What does a brat like you want at this time in the morning?" "I need your help." Alexander Rocan. He was the most successful bounty hunter that my father's angry had. I was actually surprised to find him so young. He was tall and at least a whole foot taller than me. He was rather handsome with his messy dark hair and dark eyes. His face was a bit scruffy but was quite attractive and it made him look very mature. "Help with what? Why does a middle school student like you need help with from a grown man?" He asked and he pulled out a flask from his pocket and took a drink. "I am not a middle school student! I'm a high school freshman. And what's with the drinking? It's not even seven in the morning!" "Middle school, high school. What's the difference? And because I feel like it. Why? You want some?" "I'm fifteen!" I shouted angrily. "Okay okay. No need for the anger. I like to drink. Nothing wrong with that," he said and he took another drink. "Anyways. You haven't answered my question. What the hell is a kid like you doing at my apartment this early in the minding anyways?" "My father. He was kidnapped sometimes during the night and I know who did it. Of course I can't go and get him back myself. I'm asking you to come and help me. I'm not asking you to just retrieve my father. You see..." He eyed me as I looked at the ground and bit my lip. "What?" "I-I want you to... I want you to also hunt down the men who captured him," I said and I looked up at him. "Well well. Such a violent girl. Sorry but my days if hunting are over." "Over? But aren't you still apart of that bounty hunter agency?" "Me? No. I quit about a year ago. Got tired of people telling me what to do. I'm not the kind of man who takes orders from just anybody, especially from a kid like you," he said and he ran a hand through his hair. "But I need your help. You're the only one I think capable of carrying this request out. I checked all my father's records and you were the only one who has never had an unsuccessful mission. I really really need your-" "Wait a minute. What records? How did you find me in the first place?" "Um... well... my father used to work in the same department as you." "Oh really? What's his name?" "That's not important. All I ask is that you help me get my father back. I don't have anyone else. I have no mother nor any siblings. I do not know if any extended family. For as long as I can remember it's just been me and my dad. He's all I have." "Do you even have the money to pay me?" He asked and he sighed. "Does this mean you'll help?!" "Not so fast kid! If you don't have the money then I can't help you. You have to pay me for my abilities," he said as he took another drink and smirked. "My dad and I are not poor. I myself do not have the money but my father can certainly afford your assistance. Please. I just want him back. I don't care about the consequences or the cost." "Pretty tough for a fifteen year old girl. Fine. I'll carry out your request." "Really?!" "Yes really. Now tell me everything you can about these people who kidnapped your father," he said and he leaned back in his chair. I smiled. "Okay!"
Looking forward to the next update . Don't beat yourself up over the other stories, they're good .