Omg!! First time I check fanfic after a long time and I find a new one from my fav author Your story stalker is back xD
I love how you got the girl down pack, but maybe you should work more on the boy part. The way the boy talks to her is a little confusing. One second he is calling her lame and the next her wants to kiss her...literally.
The reason for that is because he has no feelings for her. Guys can kiss girls without liking them (same for girls). I like how my character, Dante is. Although I like having your feedback, I will not be changing his character unless I feel fit to do so myself. Thank you though, for your thoughts
I will try and make it less confusing though. I will try to make it apparent that he does not seem to like her.