The Snow

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Locksmith22 (01), Jun 14, 2013.

  1. First time posting in here and I'm still not sure if I'm doing this right. Give me some feedbacks after reading *^▁^* Oh and I'll appreciate some tips..
     
  2. Frost settled on the branches above my head as I sat on one of the many benches at the park. It was snowing lightly and the park was alive with the call of winter.

    I remember seeing him for the first time walking out from in between two skeletal trees, light shining behind him because the leaden skies had just parted to give way to the sun.

    He, I remember, looked incredible. Glorious,
    even, with light set upon him. I’m not really
    sure but I remember being unable to define
    him clearly because the rays of light were
    bouncing off the frosty ground, reflecting
    bright flashes that were as white as snow.

    “You dropped something,” he told me with a charming smile. He picked it up from the
    ground – yet, I still couldn’t see his face. “I’m Andrew Smith by the way.”

    “Tiffany Laurence." I replied.
     
  3. I'll post the next chapter after I receive some feedbacks.
     
  4. saw the post in campus, so i checked it out 
     
  5. @tifa-fany
    hi thans for dropping by. you are my only reader actually. lol.
     
  6. “Drew! Stop! That tickles!” I giggled, covering
    my face. “It’s so cold!” I whined. “Baby,
    please stop!”

    One winter has passed since I first met him
    and we are currently out on a skating rink,
    skating hand in hand.

    I kept trying to avoid him as he chased me
    down the rink, one of his arms wrapped
    around my waist as I teasingly tried to
    escape from his hold on me. I could feel his
    hot breath brushing against my neck, and I
    was adoring the overflow of attention that he
    was giving to me. He made me feel like I was
    the centre of his world. He made me feel
    loved. And he made me feel beautiful.

    “Drew, sweetie,” I said in my cutest voice. “Don’t you dare do that. No! Don’t! That’s
    not funny!”

    I made a noise as he shoved some ice down
    my back. It was so cold that I could feel my
    entire body tense up from the unfavourable
    intrusion. I started to move about wildly and I
    almost fell off my skates as I moved, but
    Baek was holding onto me, fortunately, so I
    was in his hold the entire time; in his strong
    arms as winter’s snow fell from the
    tenebrous skies.

    He held me tight and I hugged him back and
    I got the feeling that he would never let me
    go. The wind was blowing, passing icy winds.
    But Baek made things different. His touch
    made me feel immune to the cold.

    “I’ll warm you up,” he whispered into my ear.

    I held onto him and I smiled against his
    chest when I noticed a commotion up ahead.

    A crowd was forming.

    “Angelina!” somebody screamed.
    Everyone then started to scream in delight.

    “Angelina, she’s so beautiful,” my boyfriend
    breathed.

    “Yeah, she is,” I agreed, my eyes closed and
    against his chest.
     
  7. AWESOME STORY!!!!
     
  8. ............. Who?