Chapter/Part 1: Coming together, the legend begins! Tempting, tempting...what do you get when half naked transgender sirens try to seduce you for your blood. It's like those vampire creatures, well then I bet calling them vampires would 'offend' their kind. My eyes are being scarred with every move they make seriously could they be less dense. I can see their true forms it's disgusting, if they were the least bit attractive I would spare them the humiliation, but I can't help it now. "Human...Human, you dare to deny me your blood?" They hissed terrifyingly at me. Feisty beasts aren't they? Pulling out a smoke bomb from my pocket I gently removed the tag lashing it out towards the frozen tundra beneath me. As a big, "BAM!!!" Noise erupted they sirens choked and wheezed on the gas. I took my chances and ran sliding through the temporary ice age. The cyclops training center called me in for an urgent emergency, this took me back just last year I didn't think gods existed or any of these creatures in fact. I couldn't 'see' my first assignment was to write down my favorite creature and turn it in the next day. As I sled and made my way through hideous turns and frozen fresh water remembering my old days it made me think of when I was walking to the training center so proud of my work when a gust of wind blew it away carrying it far. "Um, a dog ate my homework?" The excuse I had used against that old man Kenzie, but he saw through it. Heh it's too bad he's dead now tears left my eyes. When pulling up away towards green patches of land I jumped off landing two feet shy near the training center when I spotted a woman sitting in the trees, she had long dark red hair and bright red eyes with dark brown-ish skin looking below down the tree I saw a 6ft or was he 7ft tall ram on two legs, it was equipped with weapons and had a septum piercing a ring in the middle of the nose...haha I'm just seeing things now rubbing my eyes I turned away heading straight towards the main entrance. "Hector," a chilling voice chimed, "Your late, where've ya' been, did you almost die!?" It hissed then made a shrieking sound when a person with dark brown hair and chilling grey eyes stepped before me.
^(^-^)^ thanks Blaire~ most of this is pre-done. But it's something I'm just trying out for now~. I hope it attracts more readers. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ashley, my sister she always messes with me and jokes around. "Come on the others are waiting," pissed, I'm so pissed right now. I followed her to south room A13 through the dark hallways as she twisted the door knob open I found myself surrounded by the same lady I saw in the tree and her ram, as well as Kassie who was like another sister to me, and other people who I didn't know or just didn't care about. Walking in and slumping down beside Kassie the lady I saw cleared her throat. "Hello, everyone I'm a speaker Old man Kenzie used to know back in the day..." As she rambled on I sat and whispered to Kassie, "Old man Kenzie knew her back in the day?! I surprised she isn't a fossil," I snickered and made Kassie chuckle. "Yeah it seems like she's an oddball!" Eyeing us the old lady sneered then continued on. "Kenzie told me only in a time of great fear may his most trusted and brave gather. I believe it is that time, Hades has resurrected from his long slumber," The room rumbled with loud whispers and talk of doubt and fear. I stood jumping a top of my seat. "C'mon people the old man trusted you don't be a cyclops! Take the challenge defeat Hades save the world ex cetera, honestly what did the guy see in you guys, well except me of course," I proclaimed happily when a man stood up in agreement. The other half of the room stood as well only a small group sat there complaining. "What about the gods, can't they take care of it?!" A girl whined out loud, "They're supposed to guard earth, as well as protect Olympus surely the oracles foresaw some god saving us?! Are they that powerless to call upon the seer humans?" That young-old lady stood up and looked a little angered, "The gods did not do anything wrong for the oracles predicted. A seer human in the scribes the Oracles wrote about. This seer will rescue us from the depths of the underworld and grasp us out of Hades reach. The seer that shall do so is not ordinary for they bare a curse upon to this day they shall not know Apocalyptic power will be put at their disposal destroying is all they whom carries the curse curse shall know...for they is a descendent of the underworld. They also predicted the person is among Kenzie's most trusted and brave. Not just that they gave a warning the gods informed us about. The more the person uses it, the more they become less able to control it until it consumes them whole," She said sighing quietly. The room was silent, it couldn't stay like this everyone was in serious shock how boring.
"If you're scared leave, a Willy-Wonka like you shouldn't be here,"I scuffed. It's disgusting how they are supposed to be brave and trusted. The members of the complaining group stood and nodded at everybody. I'm pretty sure we all had the same mind set. Destroying Hades, and saving our homes. *Willy-Wonka- It's supposed to be a term for a scaredy cat or a weakling. Somebody who chickens out. It's something Hector says a lot* Chapter 1 continuation part 2 It's simple all we had to do was knock at Hades front door, well at least in my mind it went like this; "Hi, excuse Mrs. Hades, can Hades come outside and except our challenge so we can kill him?" Hah like taking candy from a baby. Sadly that wasn't how it would go down. We had a more detailed discussion about how things would go down. Too bad I didn't want to go into details. Sitting in the room I zoned out excited, the old man always knew what got me fired up. Fights, fights, and even more fights! He taught me more than just that though, "A true fight is not one fought physically, mentally, or magically. A true fight is fought spiritually," I whispered to myself. It was strange that old man I can still hear his voice even after he's gone. I chuckled loudly when that old-young lady turned around, "Do you have anything to add..?" She faded off scowling at me. Gee am I really that irresistible? "Names Hector, and yes I've got two things to add. One you still haven't given us your friggin' name and two who cares about the details, we knock on Hades door and crush him then go home to celebrate done deal," I smirked, while everyone scuffed at the idea. Then that giant ram stood up and cleared its throat. "Man! That thing can't speak can it!?" I screamed, while wincing at the noise. "κριάρι!κριάρι!κριάρι!" It sang repeatedly, seriously what is this?! "κριάρι? The hell?! If you're gonna speak, god dammit speak!" I yelled now I was frustrated! "I can speak κριάρι," he said eyeing me, the things voice had this edge to it I've never heard before. It wasn't a centaur, or a satyr what is this beast?! "I'm a κριάρι obviously,κριάρι! " he squealed, what does this mean...κριάρι? Wait, why the hell is this thing reading my mind? "I'm not reading your mind κριάρι, just look in a mirror you expression says everything! κριάρι," he grunted in a laughing sorta way.
Lovely to read hyped up on coffee! The main character, Hector has a go-get-'em attitude which I like. Can't wait for the next installment Cin.
Mel's Review Station Story: The Oracle's Seer Written by: -_lilCindal-_-CinCin-_ Extra Information: Mythical creatures~ Originality~ A guy discovering something he didn't know existed, travailing the land of mythical beings and experiencing things he long thought were just imaginary. The story already has a great sense of potential and gives you at least one thing to think about. Interest~ The mythical beings at the start are the typical but later on there is one creature that I found most creative and it even spoke Cin's made up language for it. It has the usual story line at the beginning which made me think it was a tad blah but it does show promise with the amount of thought it is shown. Characters~ The character, Hector gives a nice fresh feeling with a go-get-'em attitude which is really effective and makes you think on your feet and makes you want to go into that land yourself. There is also his sister with a cheeky personality adding a nice touch and interesting dialogue. Grammar~ After a ellipsis (...) remember to put a space followed by a capital letter. The foot note was an interesting addition. Try and be consistent when paragraphing so it is easy for readers to follow, either have a whole space between different people speaking or just start a new line. One sentence I saw was a tad long with no full stops, it makes it sound like a carry on. Also check for typos and grammatical issues. Summary Review~ I would recommend it for people fond of fantasy or just want to enjoy something new and quick to read. Please update~ Thank you for letting me review and sorry it took so long~