Hello and welcome to my story! I'm going to write this from a girl's point of view I think because in the stories I have read, to me at least, girls have a better viewpoint in stories like the one I'm trying to tell. There will be many errors I already know. So please bear with me and we'll have a grand ol' time haha! Thanks, Caleb ^.^ --------------------- "BEEP BEEP BEEP BEEP BEEP BEEP BEE- click." I groaned, Monday making its rounds again. Sitting up in my bed, I rub my eyes and stretch. Mondays. Lemme tell you why mondays are terrible. You just finished your weekend, and teachers expect everything done that they gave you on friday. It was 72 freaking hours ago, what do you expect, a miracle?! I got up and went to the bathroom, looking in the mirror. My brown normally wavy hair was extremely messy and unbearable. I sighed, then coughed. Ugh, Morning breath. I proceeded to take a quick shower then get dressed in my favorite outfit: Doctor Who t-shirt, blue skinny jeans and my black converse. I packed my bag and ran out the door after grabbing a peach off of the table. Mmm... Peaches.... I ran up the street to my bus stop and made it there just as the bus did. Buses are annoying because they tell you specific times. I'm normally late because I don't give a bothersome thought about time. I found an empty area in the middle and sat down. All of a sudden, after about three minutes after we left the stop, I heard a voice from the seat behind me... "Hey, what's new Kazoo?" --------------------- I write from her perspective because it makes the story better, sorry if it weirds anyone out... Hope you enjoyed it though! Sorry for starting so many sentences with I, I'm working on it! Thanks for Reading! Updating soon!
Update, so soon? Yes, because I'm bored. ^.^ --------------- "Hey, what's new Kazoo?" I turned quickly to see my best friend Julia. "Jazoo!!" I said smiling, "Come sit here!" She seat-hopped next to me and we hugged briefly. "How's AP Chem treating you, Katie?" I laughed, "Passing this quarter!" She smirked and nodded. "Did you hear about the new transfer coming in today? He's suppose to be from a rich family..." "Limo rides to school?" We laughed, both knowing what that meant... ~~FLASHBACK~~ Ashley Pannieson got out of the limousine with attitude. No, definitely not good attitude, snobby. A real pain in the... Ankle. And as soon as she waved to the driver and he moved forward, the bottom skirt part of her dress whipped off of her, leaving her completely embarrassed with only the top half of her outfit and all of her dignity flushed down the drain. ~~Back on the Bus~~ We laughed about it until we got to school. Yes, it was that funny, based on how evil she was to people. Julia pulled my sleeve. "C'mon, please come with me, I can't get breakfast alone..." I groaned, "Fiiiine..." She dragged me into the lunchroom only to find Miss Wardrobe-Malfunction herself. "Hello scumbags." "Look who got up on the wrong side of the bed..." Julia laughed at my comment and I smiled as Ashley became furious. She stormed out with her books and breakfast and we got in line. As we left, I accidentally got in a head-on collision. BOOM, CRASH, you know how sound words work. I helped the person with their papers that fell. When I looked up to hand my fellow collisionist their papers, I saw the most perfect baby blue eyes in the universe.... ------------------ Who owns the perfect eyes? Find out next time in, "The Struggles and the Nice Things"!
I like it good description but you can elaborate and use paragraphs that are more spaced... Like This haha. All over nice, keep writing expanding the story and all that and descibe the people more haha
Back for an update! ~~~~~~~~~~~~ The blue eyes belonged to a beautiful, kind face, amazing smile, and don't even get me started on his hair... Okay you got me started. His straight dirty blonde hair was strange, it was clean, but messy.... His arms looked strong yet comforting, if that's even possible, with hands to match. His torso had muscles showing through the semi-tight fabric and holy goodness this guy was awesome with that shirt.... Anyway, I collided into him and fell to the ground, he looked down at me and said, "Hello there!". He chuckled as he picked me up. I blushed and fell silent. "I'm Alex, I'm new here..." Alex stuck out his hand smiling. Shaking it, I responded, "Katie Tawn..." very abruptly and blushed. What happened next was a little... odd for a first meeting. Alex proceeded from the handshake to kiss the back of my hand and then hug me. Having no idea what was going on, I decided to go with it. He's hot and nice and not a dumbbutt like most guys these days. I think I'm in love... ~~~~~~~~~~ Shortish update but thank you jennete for some great tips! Also all of the people in this story are made up. Fictional beings. Any person, living or dead with the same name is strictly an accident.